The reading passage introduces three advantages of adapting electronic medical record systems. The professor, however, casts doubt on each points mentioned in the passage and insists that the benefits of adapting electronic record systems are unassertive.
First, the author states that electronic records can cut off the price of storing and transferring medical records. Yet, the professor stands against this point by saying that there is no significant saving since doctors who adapted electronic medical record systems did not throw up the signed paper format of the records. They keeping them for back up and sometimes for legal purposes. So, they still paying for storage cost. This indicates that there no cost reduction for medical records storage and transferring.
Second, the reading claims that medical errors that caused by improper transcription of data and organizational of paper records can be reduced by adapting electronic medical record systems. The professor opposes this idea by explaining that this the electronic system cannot eliminate the errors related to poor handwriting. She puts forth the idea that doctors still using pen and paper to write notes about patients and to write prescriptions as well which will later transcribed and entered by medical staff members in the electronic system. This indicates that the problem of illegible writing still exist.
Finally, the author avers that electronic records will help medical research by making tremendous amount of data from patients records easily accessible. Nevertheless, the narrator disputes this point by indicating that electronic medical records are subject to privacy low in the United States and in order for researchers to access them they have to go through long procedures and get many permissions including patient`s permission to use his information. As a result, accessing patient`s data is not getting any easier with adapting electronic medical record systems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...ectronic record systems are unassertive. First, the author states that electronic...
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...rds storage and transferring. Second, the reading claims that medical errors t...
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...pting electronic medical record systems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, well, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1373.03311258 123% => OK
No of words: 300.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.62666666667 5.08290768461 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85603454694 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556666666667 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 419.366225166 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.9938661294 49.2860985944 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.846153846 110.228320801 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.596848470045 0.272083759551 219% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.22838035387 0.0996497079465 229% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144619580605 0.0662205650399 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.371506782869 0.162205337803 229% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709868209904 0.0443174109184 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.3589403974 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.2367328918 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.7273730684 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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