TPO-10 - Integrated Writing Task
The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago, it caused much concern because sea otters play an important ecological role in the coastal ecosystem. Experts started investigating the cause of the decline and quickly realized that there were two possible explanations: environmental pollution or attacks by predators. Initially, the pollution hypothesis seemed the more likely of the two.
The first reason why pollution seemed the more likely cause was that there were known sources of it along the Alaskan coast, such as oil rigs and other sources of industrial chemical pollution. Water samples from the area revealed increased levels of chemicals that could decrease the otters' resistance to life-threatening infections and thus could indirectly cause their deaths.
Second, other sea mammals such as seals and sea lions along the Alaskan coast were also declining, indicating that whatever had endangered the otters was affecting other sea mammals as well. This fact again pointed to environmental pollution, since it usually affects the entire ecosystem rather than a single species. Only widely occurring predators, such as the orca (a large predatory whale), could have the same effect, but orcas prefer to hunt muchlarger prey, such as other whales.
Third, scientists believed that the pollution hypothesis could also explain the uneven pattern of otter decline: at some Alaskan locations the otter populations declined greatly, while at others they remained stable. Some experts explained these observations by suggesting that ocean currents or other environmental factors may have created uneven concentrations of pollutants along the coast.
The reading passage and lecture have conflicting points about what reason lead the otter's population to decline. The article strongly postulates that decreasing otter's population is harmful to the environment because they play a prominent role in their ecosystem also it is caused by pollution rather than predators. On the other hand, The listening adamantly delineates that current investigation has resulted that the main reason is predators because of several compelling reasons.
First and foremost, According to the author of the excerpt that their surrounding area is polluted by chemical substances and oil rigs which are reducing the otters' resistance to life-threatening infection so it affects their population adversely. Nonetheless, The professor offsets these points by declaring that along the Alaskan beach no one has found any death otters also it is expected predators may eat them.
On top of this, the professor in the listening elaborates by bringing up the point that the sea large predator orcas prefer to eat whales but they usually disappear because people hunt the whales so they have to prey on small sea animals such as otter, seals and sea lions. these claims refute the writer's implication which about the contaminated area influenced on the all species than one single population and it is not reliable that orcas feed them due to its preference is whales.
The text lastly insists that Alaskan other species remain stable but otter's population are significantly decreasing so the pollution centres along the coast. The speaker in the lecture counters these indications by asserting that it depends on locations due to the fact that orcas are so immense and the usually easily prey on along the shallow coast which is the main living area of otters.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'otters'' or 'otter's'?
Suggestion: otters'; otter's
...cting points about what reason lead the otters population to decline. The article stro...
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Line 2, column 159, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'otters'' or 'otter's'?
Suggestion: otters'; otter's
...ces and oil rigs which are reducing the otters resistance to life-threatening infectio...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
...als such as otter, seals and sea lions. these claims refute the writers implication w...
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Line 3, column 298, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
... and sea lions. these claims refute the writers implication which about the contaminate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, may, nonetheless, so, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 287.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22299651568 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75799324279 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550522648084 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.7123583132 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.555555556 110.228320801 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8888888889 21.698381199 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06452816374 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367582309498 0.272083759551 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140896276705 0.0996497079465 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658803635806 0.0662205650399 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210047179912 0.162205337803 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158095441192 0.0443174109184 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 13.3589403974 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.0289183223 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.7273730684 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.