TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task In the past century, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States,birds in particular. Unfortunately for b

The reader claims three possible reasons that lead to retrograding the birds' population and provides arguments for supporting his opinions. On the other hand, the speaker counters these specific points and presents clues to call into the information in the passage. Also, he says the arguments are not persuasive and refuses each of the author reasons.

First, the reader discusses the increment of the human population's settlements one of the causes of declining in the Birds population. While the speaker cast doubt at this point by explaining that the shrinkage in the Birds is true for some of the Birds but is groundless for other like Bigne. This increment inthe some of the Birds due to decreased Foxes and other that predator, as aresult of expantions of the human pupulatios.

Second, the reader states the agriculture growth lead to destroying the Birds habitat, the professor says the genetic modifications of the crops let the farmer not need to destruct huge areas but instead of that the new crop feed a lot of populations.

Third, the reader disputes the insecticide utilized by the human may cause the drop of the Birds populations, Conversely, the speaker says the newly modified crops that resistant to the insects, so we don't need to use the insecticide and if we need these new generations of the insecticides are not harmful to the Birds. .

Votes
Average: 6.7 (3 votes)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
...e reasons that lead to retrograding the birds population and provides arguments for s...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 237, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... the shrinkage in the Birds is true for some of the Birds but is groundless for other like ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 316, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... other like Bigne. This increment inthe some of the Birds due to decreased Foxes and other ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 203, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ps that resistant to the insects, so we dont need to use the insecticide and if we n...
^^^^
Line 4, column 323, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ecticides are not harmful to the Birds. .
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, if, may, second, so, third, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1136.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 228.0 270.72406181 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98245614035 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77680504358 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 145.348785872 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548245614035 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 21.2450331126 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 218.205369625 49.2860985944 443% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 189.333333333 110.228320801 172% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.0 21.698381199 175% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6666666667 7.06452816374 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267471440685 0.272083759551 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120906518742 0.0996497079465 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812918279704 0.0662205650399 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149581522112 0.162205337803 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558172531277 0.0443174109184 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.0 13.3589403974 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.37 53.8541721854 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 11.0289183223 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.42419426049 112% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.498013245 164% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

and other that predator,
and other predators,

the agriculture growth lead to
the agriculture growth leads to

the newly modified crops that resistant to the insects,
the newly modified crops that are resistant to the insects,

and if we need these new generations of the insecticides are not harmful to the Birds. .
and if we need, these new generations of the insecticides are not harmful to the Birds. .
and if we need these new generations of the insecticides, they are not harmful to the Birds. .

Sentence: This increment inthe some of the Birds due to decreased Foxes and other that predator, as aresult of expantions of the human pupulatios.
Error: pupulatios Suggestion: population
Error: aresult Suggestion: result
Error: expantions Suggestion: expansions
Error: inthe Suggestion: No alternate word

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flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2

Read a good grammar book.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 8 12
No. of Words: 229 250
No. of Characters: 1112 1200
No. of Different Words: 125 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.89 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.856 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.728 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 68 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 56 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.067 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.472 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.733 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.176 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4