TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The passage and lecture both discuss three statements around a process which is studying the animal fossils of Tyrannosaurs rex, a dinosaur, and that it's leg bone still might contain the remains of it's actual tissues like blood vessels, red blood cells, and collagen matrix. The professor in the lecture explains that those evidence of remains are not practical and they may have another explanation. So, he refutes each measure made in the passage.

To begin with, the reading claims that the fossilized leg bone showed several small branching channels inside indicating the probability that those hollows might be previous blood vessels. The professor invalidate this point by stating that those hollows are not the remains of blood vessels. Instead, they may be something else like bacteria which colonize the hollows when it live inside bones. This lead to the formation of traces of organic matter, like a soft and moist residue. Thus, the reading passage's first point is invalid.

Second, the passage posits that microscopic examination revealed various spheres that could be the remains of red blood cells, especially that those contained iron and were about the size of red blood cells. However, the professor refutes this measure by saying that the same identical criteria were found in another species of animals with no red blood cells. So, it is not possible that those sphere present the remains of red blood cells in Tyrannosaurus rex. There is a logic explanation that they might be from a different origin, like a reddish mineral. Consequently, the reading passage's second point is contradicted.

Third, the reading asserts that the leg bone indicated the presence of collagen. The professor opposed this point by providing some facts about the biochemical characteristics of collagen, that is never been found in organisms that age more than thousand years. So, how it is supposed to last in a species that is over 70-million years old. This contradict with their facts and ideas about collagen. A possible explanation is that the collagen found may be from another origin, like human skin of researchers. As a result, with the reasoning, the reading passage's final proposed measure is refuted.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 204, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'invalidates'.
Suggestion: invalidates
...e previous blood vessels. The professor invalidate this point by stating that those hollow...
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Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lives'?
Suggestion: lives
...eria which colonize the hollows when it live inside bones. This lead to the formatio...
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Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this sphere' or 'those spheres'?
Suggestion: this sphere; those spheres
...lood cells. So, it is not possible that those sphere present the remains of red blood cells ...
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Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...n found in organisms that age more than thousand years. So, how it is supposed to last i...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, third, thus, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 1373.03311258 136% => OK
No of words: 359.0 270.72406181 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18662952646 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62332255259 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506963788301 0.540411800872 94% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 419.366225166 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2081944903 49.2860985944 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.10526315789 7.06452816374 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.27373068433 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432451664924 0.272083759551 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11727758948 0.0996497079465 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115322880688 0.0662205650399 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264111445933 0.162205337803 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772970034034 0.0443174109184 174% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.3589403974 94% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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