Tpo 25
Both the reading passage and the article discuss the Iraqi archaeologist who gained a set of clay jars. The villagers who found these jars two years early during construction a railroad. The passage argues that these jars might be a likely as a vessel used for electrical production in the ancient time. While the professor encounters this by telling that these vessels similar to the batteries using now a day. However, the reading claims the utilization of these vessels as a battery. But the professor points out as follows.
First, the article avers that however, the vessels look like a battery because it contains copper cylinder surrounding an iron rod. But there is no evidence about a wire used to conduct the electricity. The lecture casts doubt on this point by explaining that the people who found these jars might be not recognized the cable because they are not professionals archaeologist. And they could saw the wire and throw away because they think it is useless.
Second, the article asserts that the copper cylinder inside the jars similar to that one discovered in the Seleucia. And this cylinder used for scrod. The speaker states that it is true, but not prove anything and it is possible to use the copper cylinder for holding scrolls. And and in ancient cities found that when the iron rode surrounded by cooper cylinder is used as a battery. It means may be first use for something but then adapted to apply for another.
Third, the reading claims the using of there vessels to generate electricity is not true because there is no device to use this electricity at that time. Conversely, the professor mentions that the electricity used for another thing like making magic or healing. For example, the generation of electricity produces an invisible power that caused tickling or shock. Beside, he says the electricity now use in healing by reducing the pain in muscles.
Comments
What you mean when you say
What you mean when you say more preposition wanted at the beginning of the sentences
it means need some sentences
it means need some sentences starting with the prepositions. like after, in, to, on, and with.
it is not a serious issue.
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Prepositions are usually used in front of nouns or pronouns and they show the relationship between the noun or pronoun and other words in a sentence. They describe, for example:
1. the position of something:
Her bag was under the chair.
The dog crawled between us and lay down at our feet.
His flat was over the shop.
2. the time when something happens:
They arrived on Sunday.
The class starts at 9 a.m.
Shortly after their marriage they moved to Colorado.
3. the way in which something is done:
We went by train.
They stared at each other without speaking.
Some prepositions are made up of more than one word, for example:
They moved here because of the baby.
We sat next to each other.
The hotel is perched on top of a cliff.
Essay evaluation report
who found these jars two years early during construction a railroad.
who found these jars two years ago during the time to construct a railroad.
might be a likely as a vessel
might be likely as a vessel
these vessels similar to the batteries using now a day.
these vessels are similar to the batteries using nowadays.
It means may be first use for something
It means maybe the first use is for something
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flaws:
1. No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
2. No. of Words: 322 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 12
No. of Words: 322 250
No. of Characters: 1544 1200
No. of Different Words: 160 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.236 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.795 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.552 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.947 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.615 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.436 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 40, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... First, the article avers that however, the vessels look like a battery because ...
^^
Line 3, column 277, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: And
...he copper cylinder for holding scrolls. And and in ancient cities found that when the i...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, however, look, may, second, so, then, third, while, another thing, for example, for another thing, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 322.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90683229814 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62306748027 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 502.2 419.366225166 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.51434878587 396% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7433691034 49.2860985944 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1578947368 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9473684211 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06452816374 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377624494271 0.272083759551 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117927205576 0.0996497079465 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058210174756 0.0662205650399 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228287939077 0.162205337803 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232011882173 0.0443174109184 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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