TPO 26
Both the reading and the lecture discuss the spread out of the zebra mussel, a freshwater shellfish native to Eastern Europe, to the parts of North America. The article argues these invasions have a severe effect on water populations. While the professor claims that by telling there are different ways to overcome this settlement.
First, the passage avers the invasion might continue and no way to stop this invasion of the mussel because the mussel can either attach itself with the bottom of the ship or stay a life in the fresh water. This water called ballast water which the vessel used for balance its cargo. So by that way the mussel transfer from its original habitat o the North of America. The speaker encounters this point by saying the ship could use the salt water from the ocean instead of the pure one. By that way, the mussel cannot survive because the salty water kills it.
Second, the passage points out the domination of the mussel. And this dominant cannot stop because in the new habitat there is no predators attack the mussel. Conversely, the professor casts doubt on this point by explaining that there is a type of bird could be bringing to this new habitat and eat a lot of mussels. In that way, we could control it's widely spread.
Third, the article mentions the effect of the mussel on the other water world because it will eat a lot of them. The speaker encounters this point by saying that it is true that it has a negative impact on the type of fish. Whoever, there is a positive impact on another kind, especially those fish live on the bottom of the ocean because the mussel could eat the surface fish water. So the population of the deep water will be increased.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
The article argues these invasions have a severe effect on water populations.
The article argues that these invasions have a severe effect on water populations.
While the professor claims that by telling there are different ways to overcome this settlement.
While the professor claims that there are different ways to overcome this settlement.
there is no predators attack the mussel
there is no predators to attack the mussel
there is no predators who attack the mussel
there is no predators attacking the mussel
there is a type of bird could be bringing
there is a type of bird which could be bringing
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flaws:
No. of Words: 305 250
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
for example, this is too long:
First, the passage avers the invasion might continue and no way to stop this invasion of the mussel because the mussel can either attach itself with the bottom of the ship or stay a life in the fresh water. This water called ballast water which the vessel used for balance its cargo. So by that way the mussel transfer from its original habitat o the North of America.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 12
No. of Words: 305 250
No. of Characters: 1368 1200
No. of Different Words: 147 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.179 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.485 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.182 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 58 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 28 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.31 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 236, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e a severe effect on water populations. While the professor claims that by telling th...
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Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no predators'?
Suggestion: there are no predators
... cannot stop because in the new habitat there is no predators attack the mussel. Conversely, the prof...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 233, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ive impact on the type of fish. Whoever, there is a positive impact on another ki...
^^
Line 4, column 441, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on of the deep water will be increased.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, if, second, so, third, while, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 305.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25350156034 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485245901639 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 434.7 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3217883259 49.2860985944 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6875 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0625 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6875 7.06452816374 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.420944201631 0.272083759551 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141331563251 0.0996497079465 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964257313681 0.0662205650399 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25016110163 0.162205337803 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075528429254 0.0443174109184 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.3589403974 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 53.8541721854 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 12.2367328918 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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