TPO 42
The article states that there are three solutions to prevent the birds from getting injured by the glasses that used in the building as modern architecture, and it provides three reasons for support. However, the professor claims that none of the three solutions mentioned are effective in preventing the birds from getting injured, and he refutes each of the reasons in the passage.
First, the reading asserts that replacing the regular glass by the one-way glass which is transparent in one direction. The lecture counters this point by saying that it is not an effective way to prevent the birds from injury. In fact, the outside glasses reflect the things as a mirror which will be a bad thing likes a regular glass because of the bird cannot understand the reflection of the mirror, they recognize the sky and trees in the mirror as a real thing.
Second, the article points out that using a colorful design as a second solution by painting a colorful line like a stripe. The professor contradicts this idea by telling that it is still a problem by using this colorful design. Indeed, the birds will recognize just the colorful stripe and still consider the un-color glass as a hole. However, this solution will be effective only if we color a large part of the glass, and in this case, the room will be dark.
Third, the reading explains that using a magnetic field instrument in the building will help the birds to recognize the solid objects. However, the professor demonstrates that creation of the artificial magnetic field is not successful. In fact, the birds use the magnetic field only when they travel for a long distance such as when they are moving from the cold areas to warm one, but when the birds are flying in the city in a short distance, they do not use the magnetic field to recognize the solid objects. That's why using magnetic field would not be effective.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. it is too long, look:
No. of Words: 329 250 , Write the essay in 20 minutes.
2. we should not repeat words/phrases, like: however, in fact...
3. smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low. it means you just used some plain words/phrase/sentences. Some complex/compound sentences wanted. Read sample essays from ETS, see how they develop this task:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 329 250
No. of Characters: 1525 1200
No. of Different Words: 145 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.259 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.635 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.386 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.308 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.034 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
what this mean More adverbial
what this mean More adverbial clause wanted?
An adverb clause is a group
An adverb clause is a group of words that function as an adverb. The clause can modify verbs, adverbs and adjectives by telling when, where, why, how, how much and under what condition. They begin with a subordinating conjunction (such as after, if, because and although...) and they contain a subject and a predicate.
Here are some examples of adverb clauses:
Whether you like it or not, you have to go to bed now.
She likes the red car more than her husband does.
If you pay your bills, you will have a good credit score.
Unless you run fast, you will miss the bus.
So that she would have a tan for her vacation, she went to a tanning salon.
Marty kept his schedule open, in case of emergencies.
Because he loved her, he didn’t believe she had an affair.
Once they saw the car coming, the birds flew away from the street.
Although she has a business degree, she is working as a retail clerk.
You must keep practicing the etude until you get it right.
In order to have six-pack abs, he works out at the gym.
As we bought the tickets, the overture was beginning.
Before we go on vacation, we must make reservations.
Give us a call when you get back from your trip.
I won’t allow you to see that movie, even though you are old enough.
We’ll go to the bar where they asked us to wait.
Since I'll be working late, I’ll eat downtown.
Wherever there is a beach, sun worshippers will gather.
While others saw the glass half empty, Barry saw it half full.
The fireworks show will start after the sun goes down.
That is the last of the soda, as far as I know.
Whenever you promise to so something, you need to keep it.
Now that everyone has left the party, we need to start cleaning.
No matter how many times I try to stop, I just can’t give up chocolate.
Insofar as it can be determined, this is the best car on the market.
We can get some new clothes provided the store is open this late.
The cat made herself at home in the apartment as if she had always lived there.
Frank ran the race as though his life depended on it.
The people of Italy and Greece are similar in that they live near the Mediterranean Sea.
He remembered to wear his jacket lest he catch a cold.
We can swim in the pool as soon as we put on plenty of sunscreen.
Even if all around you are losing their heads, you need to remain calm.
Supposing your son took the car without permission, what would your punishment be?
Delaware was the first state that signed the Constitution.
Inasmuch as I would like to recommend you for the position, I just can’t do it.
I never knew how wonderful life could be till I met you.
There may come a time when I would do this, though I can’t imagine when that would be.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 514, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...c field to recognize the solid objects. Thats why using magnetic field would not be e...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, still, third, as to, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 329.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75683890578 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46203609873 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462006079027 0.540411800872 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8847018427 49.2860985944 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.384615385 110.228320801 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3076923077 21.698381199 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 7.06452816374 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.473079085705 0.272083759551 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163459942759 0.0996497079465 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583449073107 0.0662205650399 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259125181396 0.162205337803 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422359829334 0.0443174109184 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.3589403974 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 53.8541721854 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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