The reading states using electronic databases for medical record has more benefits then ‘’using paper-based record keeping’’. The speaker, however, tells us that using electronic databases is uncertain for some ways.
First, the author describes that paper records need an important amount of storage to keep. So, using electronic papers are able to save significant money by storing. The speaker says that paper records should not throw out because files have to use in emergence situations. With federals laws, signatures for legal papers are required. So, hospitals are required to pay storage.
Second, the reading says that, electronic records have a importance to reduce chance of medical mistakes because doctors usually do a handwriting mistakes and poor hand writing. However the speaker tells us that we should not eliminate paper records for poor hand writing by mistake because doctors still examine patients by paper with handwriting and office keep the documents even poor hand writing includes some mistakes.
Third, the reading states that doctors store a great amount of paper records in their room and this records have 1000 of patient’s data. If they keep data on computer it will be very easy to access by other doctors. However the lecturer says that it is not easy that seem because laws do not permit it because of privacy. If patients do not give a permission or block their medical records for any purpose, it will not make sense to store records on computer.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...es for medical record has more benefits then ''using paper-based record ke...
^^^^
Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ding says that, electronic records have a importance to reduce chance of medical ...
^
Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...writing mistakes and poor hand writing. However the speaker tells us that we should not...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 142, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cords have 1000 of patient's data. If they keep data on computer it will be v...
^^
Line 4, column 221, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...e very easy to access by other doctors. However the lecturer says that it is not easy t...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, still, then, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1272.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 243.0 270.72406181 90% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23456790123 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77638434796 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 145.348785872 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4220469451 49.2860985944 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8461538462 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6923076923 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84615384615 7.06452816374 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.452402315467 0.272083759551 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158055391546 0.0996497079465 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103096013506 0.0662205650399 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278269669953 0.162205337803 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394432215398 0.0443174109184 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.3589403974 94% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.8541721854 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.