TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

The article discussed three advantages of using electronic medical record systems comparing to traditional paper-based record keeping. The lecturer, however, asserted that the benefits are actually uncertain.

The lecturer started with arguing that electronic medical records were in fact not reducing the storage costs. Doctors, regardless of using electronic medical record system or not, will keep the paper records for emergency back-up, as the original paper documents with signatures may be needed for legal reasons. As a result doctors have to pay for the storage fee for record saving in any case.

Secondly, electronic medical records will not prevent or reduce errors caused by sloppy handwriting or wrong data transcription, said the lecturer. Most doctors, including those who have adopted electronic record keeping, will still note down the prescriptions by hand while examining patients and the information will be entered into the electronic systems by an assistant at the later stage. The assistant needs to translate the doctor’s handwriting which will not prevent mistakes caused by poor handwriting from happening.

Finally, electronic record system will not be of help to medical research. Researchers will still find it difficult to access to medical information due to strict privacy laws in the country. Patients have the right to decide whether disclosing their medical records to clinical research or not. Researchers will have to undergo strict and complicated procedures and obtain many permissions to access to medical data and information. In many cases, such permissions may not be granted. For example, a patient can choose to block his/her information and reveal it only for his/her own treatment.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'for example', 'in fact', 'as a result', 'in any case', 'in many cases']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255102040816 0.261695866417 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.163265306122 0.158904122519 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.122448979592 0.0723426182421 169% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0510204081633 0.0435111971325 117% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0136054421769 0.0277247811725 49% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0918367346939 0.128828473217 71% => OK
Participles: 0.0646258503401 0.0370669169778 174% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.86768192669 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0442176870748 0.0208969081088 212% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00340136054422 0.00154638098197 220% => OK
Determiners: 0.078231292517 0.128158765124 61% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0374149659864 0.0158828679856 236% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00680272108844 0.0114777025283 59% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1743.0 1645.83664459 106% => OK
No of words: 264.0 271.125827815 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.60227272727 6.08160592843 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.04852973271 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.473484848485 0.374372842146 126% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.371212121212 0.287516216867 129% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.257575757576 0.187439937562 137% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.174242424242 0.113142543107 154% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86768192669 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568181818182 0.539623497131 105% => OK
Word variations: 57.7412507516 53.8517498576 107% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0529801325 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.8571428571 21.7502111507 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7026361556 49.3711431718 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.5 132.220823453 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 21.7502111507 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.07142857143 0.878197800319 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.39072847682 29% => OK
Readability: 55.9783549784 50.5018328374 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.80597014925 1.90840788429 95% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.560653574434 0.549887131256 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130529036826 0.142949733639 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0739495803372 0.0787303798458 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.577256558144 0.631733273073 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.137514711894 0.139662658121 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.220092093582 0.266732575781 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835588415796 0.103435571967 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.281589073593 0.414875509568 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.030576294553 0.0530846634433 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.366802975049 0.40443939384 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500762784425 0.0528353158467 95% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.62251655629 28% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 4.0 10.2958057395 39% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.