The lecture and reading both discusses about the use of electronic data in medical system. The Lecturer explains disadvantages of using electronic record system. However, the passage provides benefits of keeping electronic medical record system.
First of all, the article suggests that using electronic medical record system will significantly reduce the storage cost due to discontinuation of paper records. This point has been refuted by the speaker. She believes that doctors do not throw the hand-written medical records. They require documents with original signature. These records are usually stored as back up in case of emergency. Thus, they still need to pay the storage cost. So claim of reducing costs of storage is false.
Second, the use of electronic records will reduce the medical errors caused due to poor hand writing, incorrect transcription and disorganization of paper records. On the other hand, the speaker wants to claim that most doctors use paper, to initially document the patients history and provide prescriptions. Furthermore, the medical staff is responsible for uploading the electronic data. So, there are high chances of misinterpretation of certain information by staff members. Thus human errors are not unavoidable.
Finally, the writer mentions that electronification of medical records will aid in medical research. Additionally, it will be easier for data gathering and easy accessibility of the records will be an added advantage. On the contrary, the orator believes that there are very strict privacy laws regarding the access of patients records. The researchers will have to follow very lengthy procedure for getting hold of records. Moreover, patients may block the use of their medical records for the purposes other than their treatment. Therefore, the use of electronic medical record storage would not help in any research projects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 266, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...rs use paper, to initially document the patients history and provide prescriptions. Furt...
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Line 5, column 480, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...f certain information by staff members. Thus human errors are not unavoidable. Fi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, so, still, therefore, thus, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 289.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56055363322 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00415376362 2.5805825403 116% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567474048443 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 419.366225166 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 21.2450331126 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.054820945 49.2860985944 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.5238095238 110.228320801 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7619047619 21.698381199 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2380952381 7.06452816374 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.554763206354 0.272083759551 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158277945587 0.0996497079465 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113499126414 0.0662205650399 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.347399017812 0.162205337803 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249261901032 0.0443174109184 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.2367328918 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 63.6247240618 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.498013245 69% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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