various types of motivation along with example
The reading passage and the lecture followed it both revolve around a concept called "Motivation".
The lecture is in harmony with the passage and besides it provides a story of a girl named "Marnie" as an example to provide a clear view on the topic.
Firstly, in the story of Marnie said by the lecturer, she was a girl with great liking towards singing. She started singing right from her childhood. She never expected any reward or attention from people for her singing. She enjoyed every minute and moment of her singing process. As a result she gained pleasure and self-fulfillment, this resulted in the intrinsic motivation in her as stated in the passage by the author where the person gives more prominence to pleasure and satisfaction rather than monetary goods and services.
Secondly, as she continued to sing in the school functions, ceremonies etc, she gained fame, sometimes she was even invited to picnic spots to sing songs. Eventually she started earning money and now the intrinsic motivation accompained with extrinsic motivation, the other form of motivation stated in the passage where we seek monetary things in return for the activities we perform. So Marnie led a peaceful life with money and satisfaction.
Thirdly, as the demand for her songs in public places increased her interest towards singing started to erode. At the movement when she got an offer from a reputed organisation for singing, she was no way interested in singing but she agreed only for the the sum of money they offered. So finally her extrinsic motivation dominated the intrinsic motivation this situation is called "over justification".
All in all, as stated in the passage motivation is sum of needs and wants that cause a person to act.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... attention from people for her singing. She enjoyed every minute and moment of her ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...sted in singing but she agreed only for the the sum of money they offered. So finally h...
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Line 9, column 252, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...sted in singing but she agreed only for the the sum of money they offered. So finally h...
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Line 11, column 103, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s and wants that cause a person to act.
^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248502994012 0.261695866417 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.155688622754 0.158904122519 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0479041916168 0.0723426182421 66% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0419161676647 0.0435111971325 96% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0718562874251 0.0277247811725 259% => OK
Prepositions: 0.134730538922 0.128828473217 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0449101796407 0.0370669169778 121% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.13266761052 2.5805825403 121% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0209580838323 0.0208969081088 100% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.122754491018 0.128158765124 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.0158828679856 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0119760479042 0.0114777025283 104% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1786.0 1645.83664459 109% => OK
No of words: 291.0 271.125827815 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.13745704467 6.08160592843 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.04852973271 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.395189003436 0.374372842146 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.288659793814 0.287516216867 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.192439862543 0.187439937562 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.127147766323 0.113142543107 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13266761052 2.5805825403 121% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536082474227 0.539623497131 99% => OK
Word variations: 54.412536226 53.8517498576 101% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0529801325 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.7857142857 21.7502111507 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1613900865 49.3711431718 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.571428571 132.220823453 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7857142857 21.7502111507 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.857142857143 0.878197800319 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.09492273731 147% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.39072847682 118% => OK
Readability: 49.6516936672 50.5018328374 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.58888888889 1.90840788429 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112869839554 0.549887131256 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.138422047653 0.142949733639 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0949873810995 0.0787303798458 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.616646946386 0.631733273073 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.236563431083 0.139662658121 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543290771111 0.266732575781 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461535023405 0.103435571967 45% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.325129614651 0.414875509568 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0834688485455 0.0530846634433 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0793515129923 0.40443939384 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265087146415 0.0528353158467 50% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 3.49668874172 143% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.62251655629 28% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.1766004415 31% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 10.2958057395 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Not in a correct format.
The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%) but more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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