Some people like to stand out from the crowd; others just want to be part of it. Which do you prefer and why?
“Why to fit in when you can stand out!” said Dr. Seuss. In my opinion, standing out when helping others is more fulfilling as compared to blending in being a bystander. In society, people who yearn to make a difference and stand up for what is right are often praised for their bravery in contrast to those who are passive.
There are many headstrong individuals such as Greta Thunberg and Malala Yousafzai. From a young age, these individuals stood up for their beliefs and even made sure that relevant authorities were aware of the causes that they support. Malala stood up for her belief that women should receive an education. Even though she was shot, that did not hinder her from defending her ideals. Her bravery attracted international attention and she used it to her advantage to convince others about the importance of education. Greta Thunberg rallied with many teenagers to reproach grown-ups about their behavior and what they plan to do about global warming. She has received a lot of hate even from the president yet she still stands up for her beliefs.
Personally, I have always enjoyed expressing my views and changing people’s perception of issues. Though not all may agree with my stand, I feel fulfilled knowing that people support my view. In primary school, I had always wanted to be the class chairperson, and I was finally able to do so in primary 6 where I received the most votes.
Every year on teachers’ day, I would get volunteers to come to school early and prepare the surprise for teachers ready. Besides buying poppers and banners to decorate the class, we would also prepare food for the class party. My classmates volunteered to distract the teachers before they entered the classroom. When everything was ready, everyone popped the poppers and shouted “Happy teacher’s day”.
I enjoyed leading a group of students to accomplish something to appreciate our teachers. When a whole group of playful individuals set aside their differences to work together is not an easy feat. Through such experiences, I feel more comfortable leading a group of students rather than listening to the instruction given by others. I preferred being able to control the situation and thinking on my toes in order for everything to run as smoothly as possible with minimum slip-ups.
On foundress day in my school, I felt that it would be a great opportunity to do something different. Instead of giving household items and canned food, I proposed to my classmates that we could prepare cards with bible verses and handcrafted goodie bags instead. Many classmates of mine supported the idea and we then decided to chip in. Each person contributed two dollars and we collected about $80. With the money collected, I headed to the nearby value dollar with a few of my friends after school to buy essential items and some snacks. Each student had to customize two cards including a bible verse or an encouraging quote in their various mother tongue languages. After school, we went to distribute the bags to the blocks near our school. I enjoyed being able to lead my classmates and seeing the fruits of my efforts. I prefer standing out from the crowd as I feel that communicating with others gives me satisfaction and that I also played my part spearheading the project. Instead of going with the flow like many of my classmates, it is a good feeling to have people who support one’s decisions and take into consideration their opinions.
I feel strongly about being able to lead others and having opportunities to state my view towards issues or projects. Being able to have a say and communicating comes very naturally to me. Unlike others who prefer blending in and going with the flow, that is something I am unable to do as I feel the need to speak my mind no matter the situation.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y in contrast to those who are passive. There are many headstrong individuals su...
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Line 7, column 404, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pers and shouted “Happy teacher’s day”. I enjoyed leading a group of students to...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 91, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...h something to appreciate our teachers. When a whole group of playful individuals se...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, if, may, so, still, then, i feel, in contrast, such as, in contrast to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 79.0 24.0651302605 328% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 41.998997996 236% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3183.0 1615.20841683 197% => OK
No of words: 654.0 315.596192385 207% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86697247706 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05701727356 4.20363070211 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72567874089 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 342.0 176.041082164 194% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522935779817 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 957.6 506.74238477 189% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 5.43587174349 405% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 16.0721442886 212% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2531214122 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6176470588 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35294117647 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 8.67935871743 277% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190881375662 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436420830895 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572280438389 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0895328565758 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611283356376 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 78.4519038076 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y in contrast to those who are passive. There are many headstrong individuals su...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 404, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pers and shouted “Happy teacher’s day”. I enjoyed leading a group of students to...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 91, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...h something to appreciate our teachers. When a whole group of playful individuals se...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, if, may, so, still, then, i feel, in contrast, such as, in contrast to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 79.0 24.0651302605 328% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 41.998997996 236% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3183.0 1615.20841683 197% => OK
No of words: 654.0 315.596192385 207% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86697247706 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05701727356 4.20363070211 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72567874089 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 342.0 176.041082164 194% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522935779817 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 957.6 506.74238477 189% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 5.43587174349 405% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 16.0721442886 212% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2531214122 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6176470588 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35294117647 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 8.67935871743 277% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190881375662 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436420830895 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572280438389 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0895328565758 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611283356376 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 78.4519038076 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.