At school, you have been discussing the ways that teenagers spend their free time. Your teacher wants you to write an essay for the school magazine. In your essay, discuss voluntary work and how it can benefits students
Unpaid work
For a recent discussion about how teenagers should spend their spare time, whether it is better to do some leisure activities such as volunteer work or relaxing, I would prefer the first choice.
Volunteer work can best be defined as a free, non-profit activity act of an individual or group freely giving time and labor for community service. Being a volunteer as a student has lots of benefits. It can bring meaning and purpose to your life while increasing your self-esteem and well-being. Volunteering can also relieve stress, and alleviate symptoms of depression.
As well as having a positive impact on your community, volunteering can improve relationships. Volunteering gives young people plenty of skills in the future, they would learn to respect others, learn to be helpful, and most importantly learn to understand people who are different. As they make new connections and learn skills to advance their career, student volunteers feel happier and healthier in the future.
Finally, for the common good of the community and yourself, unpaid work just a few hours a week on weekends or during summer break will enrich their experience in a big way.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, so, well, while, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 43.0788530466 28% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 52.1666666667 35% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 985.0 1977.66487455 50% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 192.0 407.700716846 47% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13020833333 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 4.48103885553 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84631961896 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 212.727598566 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.661458333333 0.524837075471 126% => OK
syllable_count: 294.3 618.680645161 48% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4843209984 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.444444444 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198188304907 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777996049562 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524833376952 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11226672181 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469008335662 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.6 Out of 6.0
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