The birth rate in most developed countries begins to fall and aging increase. What can be done now to deal with this situation?

Recently, the phenomenon of birth fall in developed countries and its corresponding impacts has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many that decline in population cannot be highly beneficial, such an issue is regarded as thoroughly both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I am inclined to believe that this increase in aging can be negative, and I will analyze that throughout this essay.
To begin with, there are various reasons to dismiss the decreasing population in developed countries. At first, smaller population decline is equal to lower young people that resulting in less demand for job, which is an important problem in many countries today. However, an aging population brings many troubles to the governments. For example, more old people means more pensioners and more need to care services.
In addition, less young workers enhance the age of retirements and having old workers that are more experienced. But, there are many disadvantages to having old specialists. From a scientific research undertaken by a reputable university, the companies with aged workers do not benefit the energy and activity of young employees. Thus, the costs of lower birth are very affecting the economy.
To conclude, while there are several compelling arguments about the effects of this situation, I profoundly believe that the drawbacks of lower birth rate far outweighed its benefits.

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Average: 7.7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.5418719212 95% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 6.10837438424 65% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 20.9802955665 67% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 31.9359605911 97% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1208.0 1207.87684729 100% => OK
No of words: 224.0 242.827586207 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39285714286 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.92707691288 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98955185281 2.71678728327 110% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 139.433497537 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611607142857 0.580463131201 105% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 379.143842365 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.6157635468 43% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3449232971 50.4703680194 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.666666667 104.977214359 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.9669160288 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.25397266985 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.33497536946 75% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 6.9802955665 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 2.75862068966 254% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20222066504 0.242375264174 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671533306205 0.0925447433944 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581578159485 0.071462118173 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110564142838 0.151781067708 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554216946785 0.0609392437508 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 12.6369458128 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.1260098522 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 11.5310837438 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.32886699507 115% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 55.0591133005 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.94827586207 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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