Does video communication with the doctor help patient to cure any disease? pros and cons?
Recently, the phenomenon of video conference for treatment and its corresponding impacts has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many that the matter of helping patients by remote communication is highly beneficial, such issue is regarded thoroughly both positive and constructive by a substantial number of individuals. Throughout this essay, we are going to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of doctors' video connection in order to cure disease remotely.
From the technological standpoint, video connection for disease treatments can provide advantages with some noticeable effects which are rooted in the fact that doctors accessibility improvement as well as faster diagnosis. According to my personal experience, when I was a university student, I performed an academic experiment which discovered that despite the probability of mistakes in remote doctors' treatment via the Internet, many people prefer this type of treatment because they intended to be convenient. Thus the beneficial consequences of video communication apparently can be seen.
Within the realm of medical science, video communication might increase the consequences of disadvantages. Moreover, the fundamental aspects of video conferences related to this reality that the demerits of mistaken prescriptions pertain to lack of Internet facilities. As a tangible example, a scientific research undertook by a prestigious university has asserted that the downsides of video communication are correlated negatively with lack of technological facilities in the rural area as well as hospitals. Hence, it is correct to presume the preconceived notion of indifference for deprived regions.
In summary, while there are several compelling arguments on both sides, the benefits of remote connection for curing any disease far outweigh its drawbacks. Not only do the advantages of quick diagnosis prove the significance of technology in medical science, but also pinpoint availability implications.
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According to my personal experience?
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Suggestion: Based on my experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, in summary, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.5418719212 95% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 6.10837438424 49% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 8.36945812808 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 20.9802955665 76% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 31.9359605911 132% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 5.75862068966 313% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1207.87684729 141% => OK
No of words: 288.0 242.827586207 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.92013888889 5.00649968141 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.4200930623 2.71678728327 126% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 139.433497537 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618055555556 0.580463131201 106% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 379.143842365 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.57093596059 121% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.5024630542 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1603549075 50.4703680194 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.083333333 104.977214359 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.9669160288 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41666666667 7.25397266985 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 6.9802955665 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252843687503 0.242375264174 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801263528268 0.0925447433944 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542719580565 0.071462118173 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136889421074 0.151781067708 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450205178304 0.0609392437508 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 12.6369458128 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 53.1260098522 41% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.54236453202 199% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.9458128079 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.35 11.5310837438 150% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.02 8.32886699507 132% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 55.0591133005 205% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.94827586207 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.3980295567 112% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.5123152709 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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