The Growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in a effort to deal withthe health issues involved Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the s

Owing to the problems which a growing population of overweight people cause for the health care system,
some people think that the key to solving these issues is to have more sport and exercise in schools.
In my opinion, I completely agree that this is the best way to tackle the issue of deteriorating public health in relation to weight.
Firstly, dealing with the issues surrounding obesity and weight problems is best
solved by taking a long term approach and introducing more sport and exercise in
schools. This method will ensure that the next generation will be healthier and will
not have such health problems. At the moment, the average child in the West does
sport possibly twice a week, which is not enough to counteract their otherwise
sedentary lifestyle. However, by incorporating more sports classes into the
curriculum as well as encouraging extracurricular sports activities, they will
undoubtedly become fitter and more active.

Another point to consider is that having more sports lessons for children in schools
will probably result in children developing an interest in exercise which might filter
through to other members of their family and have a longer lasting effect. In other
words, parents with sporty children are more likely to get involved in sport as a way
of encouraging their children. By both parents and children being involved, it will
ensure that children grow up to incorporate sport into their daily lives. This is
certainly a natural and lasting way to improve public health.

In conclusion, to deal with an increasing population of unfit, overweight people,
changing the lifestyle of the coming generation by introducing sport in schools is the
easiest and most effective method to use.

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Average: 7.1 (5 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, so, well, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.5418719212 95% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 8.36945812808 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 20.9802955665 81% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 31.9359605911 135% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1488.0 1207.87684729 123% => OK
No of words: 282.0 242.827586207 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27659574468 5.00649968141 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72751979225 2.71678728327 100% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 139.433497537 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542553191489 0.580463131201 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.0 379.143842365 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 3.65517241379 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.4356581581 50.4703680194 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.272727273 104.977214359 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6363636364 20.9669160288 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 7.25397266985 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 4.12807881773 509% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267529722286 0.242375264174 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105986177129 0.0925447433944 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921579219157 0.071462118173 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0738503121485 0.151781067708 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0778526910489 0.0609392437508 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 12.6369458128 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.1260098522 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.9458128079 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 11.5310837438 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32886699507 106% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 55.0591133005 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.94827586207 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.5123152709 133% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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