The information revolution by modern mass media has both positive and negative consequences for individuals and for society To what extent do you agree

Recently, the phenomenon of the information revolution and its corresponding impacts has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many that the matter of mass media is highly beneficial, such an issue is regarded thoroughly both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I am inclined to believe that social media can be a plus, and I will analyze that throughout this essay.
From a social standpoint, mass media like television can provide the society with some noticeable effects, which are rooted in the fact that merits of getting information, as well as online education, are inextricably bound up. According to my own experience, when I was a university student, I performed an academic experiment which discovered the role of mass media in people's life. Thus, beneficial ramifications of both individuals' life and social improvements apparently can be seen.
Within the realm of telecommunication, modern mass media might increase the consequences of communication issues. Moreover, fundamental aspects of mental health relate to this reality that the demerits of individual's sedentary life pertain to unhealthy societies. As a tangible example, some scientific research undertaken by a prestigious university has asserted that the downside of media streams correlated negatively with physical health. Hence, it is correct to presume the preconceived notion of the revolutionizing way of information.
To conclude, while there are several compelling arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that the benefits of Informative mediums far outweigh its drawbacks. Not only do the advantages of having a knowledgeable society prove the significance of getting information, but also pinpoint the individual's needs.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 424, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
... Thus, beneficial ramifications of both individuals life and social improvements apparently...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 6.10837438424 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 5.94088669951 168% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 20.9802955665 86% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 31.9359605911 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.75862068966 191% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1207.87684729 124% => OK
No of words: 263.0 242.827586207 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67300380228 5.00649968141 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.39526481409 2.71678728327 125% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 139.433497537 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642585551331 0.580463131201 111% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 379.143842365 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5024630542 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3299817375 50.4703680194 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.333333333 104.977214359 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9166666667 20.9669160288 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.25397266985 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225285024078 0.242375264174 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689899364344 0.0925447433944 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400731768203 0.071462118173 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119654416444 0.151781067708 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0110355359951 0.0609392437508 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 12.6369458128 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 53.1260098522 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.54236453202 199% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.9458128079 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 11.5310837438 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.68 8.32886699507 128% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 55.0591133005 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.94827586207 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.3980295567 100% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.5123152709 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 76.5 Out of 90
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