Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
School is for a child to learn, make friends and play, They do not have the capacity to understand what is good and bad for them. It is school's responsibility to make a school right place for little children to have a safe place to learn.
Firstly, an advertisement is where a company spending money to make more money regardless of the impact it will bring to the community or school children. For example, when I was a little kid, we have big advertising board outside of our school and whenever we had enough money to buy that product we bought it. The negative effects of advertisement on children are unimaginable, it can not be counted on dollar value.
Secondly, If a school is lacking in funding there are other ways to boost their funding level. By asking parents to contribute to school fees on top of what is subsidised by the government. We as a society need to understand the long-term effects of big business policy to luring schools for extra money scheme. Such as a soft drink company's advertisements in schools are causing a lot of damage to school children. Diseases like diabetes, obesity are consequences of this.
Finally, we want our kids to be healthy, happy and productive. To achieve that we need to act earlier and contribute whatever we can. If a child learns a healthy lifestyle in school and at home then there will be a healthy environment for them to flourish.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 8.36945812808 84% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 5.94088669951 67% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 20.9802955665 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 31.9359605911 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1154.0 1207.87684729 96% => OK
No of words: 247.0 242.827586207 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67206477733 5.00649968141 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 3.92707691288 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81262610562 2.71678728327 104% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 139.433497537 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558704453441 0.580463131201 96% => OK
syllable_count: 360.0 379.143842365 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.0610818011 50.4703680194 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.7692307692 104.977214359 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.9669160288 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 7.25397266985 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.33497536946 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24444694536 0.242375264174 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895939036471 0.0925447433944 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642870084291 0.071462118173 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157211492193 0.151781067708 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578494030679 0.0609392437508 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 12.6369458128 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.1260098522 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.9458128079 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 11.5310837438 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.32886699507 90% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 55.0591133005 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.94827586207 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.