Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Dancing plays an important role in a culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Although people have different opinions about dancing, I believe that dancing plays an important role in a culture because knowing how to dance makes people proud of their own country and helps people have a enjoyable time in a event.
To begin with, if people know how to dance with the music from their country, they can be proud of themselves. For example, one of my friends from Brazil knows how to dance samba. She told me that whenever she dances samba, she remembers about Brazil even though she is not living in Brazil right now. She is proud of herself as Brazilian because she can dance samba.
In addition to giving the pride of their own country, dancing offers a good time with their friends and family. For example, I have seen people dance their traditional dancing in a weddding party. When people dance, they usually have a great time together. Some people enjoy dancing, while others enjoy watching. In other occassion, I have seen people dance when celebrating their national holidays, which is one of cultual events.
To sum up, dancing has a great effect in a culture. Not only does it make people proud of their country, but also people can have quality time in a event.
Sentence: In other occassion, I have seen people dance when celebrating their national holidays, which is one of cultual events.
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Error: cultual Suggestion: cultural
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