If you could travel back in time to meet a famous person from history, what person would you like to meet? Use specific reason and example to support your choice?

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If you could travel back in time to meet a famous person from history, what person would you like to meet? Use specific reason and example to support your choice?

If I granted an opportunity to travel back in time, the first person I would like to meet is the prophet Mohammed, who was the last messenger of Allah. I really want to meet him, because this person was friendly with everyone. In addition, millions of people over the world respect him. Therefore, if I had the chance, I really would meet him, and stand beside him, perceive his strength; I said that for following reasons.

First off, the prophet Mohammed is a symbol of humanity. In addition, he was the honest person in his city. Moreover, this characteristic made him so famous with his people. However, he had hard time to spread his message, but he never gave up. For example, when he started talking about his message, his uncles were the most people who were against him, and they wanted him to stop talking more for his message. However, he tried again and again. In addition, he taught us that we should be thankful to the God in all the time. Especially when we have problems or when we miss some one. And he explained that by many examples from his life. Such as, he didn’t see his parents since he was born, and he grew up at his uncle’s house, also he was responsible for his self, when he was eight years old.

Another reason why I want to meet this famous person is that he is humble. Furthermore, he had many characteristics, but humble it was the most one made him lovely. Furthermore, the prophet respected all people, especially poor people and women. However, in these days any famous person, who is so busy, will think that is not worth to waste his time to speak to these poor people. In addition, he told us to respect the others whoever they are. Muslim, Jewish…ect.

All in all, I believe the prophet Mohammed is our guidance in our life, and he is symbol of humble and wisdom.

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Sentence: Furthermore, he had many characteristics, but humble it was the most one made him lovely.
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However, he had hard time to spread his message, but he never gave up.
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