Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When we go to travel to new place, visit of museums is one of the important part of our travel. Museums are a background of every city or country culture. Most of the people, when they go to new place, in one of the day that they are in travelling, they planning for go to museums for two important reasons.
First, they can inform of cities or countries culture, because in every museums in the world, there are some important symbol of their history and the culture. For example, when I go to the Malaysia and Singapore last year, one of the day in our trip, we went to many famous museums with our leader in those countries. Also I could get a lot information about history for many years ago and well-known person that efficient for themselves country and world. Every thing in museum is originate of culture, history background of every city.
Second, it is very amusing to visit of museums in every new place, and we can keep one day of our travel to visit of this place and have a nice and memorable day. For instance, when I was at university in Tehran, our history teacher decided to made a some group to visit of famous and best museums in Tehran. Therefore it was one day of my life, that I never forgot, because I had a nice day with my classmates and our teacher in that museum, and moreover our teacher explained about important things such as coin, carpet or painting that were in that museum, I remember that he explained with detail about every things that were in that museum, just we could not take any photo of that museum because in the most of the museums, take photo is forbidden.
We can conclude that visit of museum is one day in most of traveler people that travel to new place for inform of the city or country culture, that this is very amusing day.
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Sentence: Every thing in museum is originate of culture, history background of every city.
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Sentence: For instance, when I was at university in Tehran, our history teacher decided to made a some group to visit of famous and best museums in Tehran.
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Sentence: We can conclude that visit of museum is one day in most of traveler people that travel to new place for inform of the city or country culture, that this is very amusing day.
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