The author argues that the population of the arctic deer has declined based on reports of local hunters and the general trend in global warming. However, there is no specific evidence to bolster this argument.
Firstly, the author makes a conclusion based on the reports from the local hunters but fails to provide the authenticity of the report. The author must provide details regarding the number of local hunters involved in the survey and the source of the report. It is also possible that some of the local hunters might have conspired to prevent additional hunters in their region. All these factors mentioned above are crucial to bolstering the argument.
Secondly, the author draws out a conclusion based on recent global warming trends but he fails to provide accurate evidence of Canada's arctic regions. The author should mention the current global warming trends in Canada regarding the melting of ice. It is possible that Canada is not completely affected by global warming and ice melting is not a trend in these regions. Also, there is no strong evidence about the population of arctic deers. The author should provide a report showing the population changes in arctic deer in recent years. There can be several other reasons for the decline in the number of arctic deer's population like endemic diseases, etc.
Conclusively, to make the argument more strong author should provide strong evidence regarding the authenticity of the report of local hunters and the impact of global warming on Canada's arctic region.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 251 350
No. of Characters: 1260 1500
No. of Different Words: 111 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.98 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.02 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.416 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.34 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.418 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.418 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fic evidence to bolster this argument. Firstly, the author makes a conclusion b...
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Line 4, column 41, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...of the report. It is also possible that some of the local hunters might have conspired to p...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re crucial to bolstering the argument. Secondly, the author draws out a conclus...
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Line 5, column 619, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'deers'' or 'deer's'?
Suggestion: deers'; deer's
...for the decline in the number of arctic deers population like endemic diseases, etc. ...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...population like endemic diseases, etc. Conclusively, to make the argument more ...
^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...obal warming on Canadas arctic region.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1291.0 2260.96107784 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 251.0 441.139720559 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14342629482 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46925829994 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 204.123752495 55% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450199203187 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 705.55239521 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.201441666 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3076923077 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11430030871 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503432662644 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360890683805 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0509247710422 0.128457276422 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558985681893 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 98.500998004 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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