The advertising director of super screen movie production company claims that greater share of budget should be kept for advertising their movie to reach more people. The author provide evidences which might be convincing. However, crucial analysis is required in order to tag the argument to be legit.
Firstly, the author claims that fewer people attended super screen movies last year. There might be chances of having reduced number of shows in a theatre or less amount of time involved in hosting a movie. The author must provide statstical data evidences regarding number of theatres in which the movie was hosted along with number of people who attended and time period of hosting the movie.
Secondly, the author claims that even if lesser people attended super screen movies, there were more positive reviews from movie reviewers. There might be possibility that people would not depend on reviews provided by movie reviewers. Hence, the author fails to provide evidences regarding relationship between movie reviewers and people adhering to it. Moreover, people would be dependent on reviews provided on social media. Thus, author must provide evidences regarding this situation.
Finally, the author claims that problem lies with public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality movies are available. There might be possibility of movie being pyrated and viewed in other devices such as mobile, computer leading to less amount of people attending theatres to watch the movie. The author must state clear evidences regarding this possibility.
In summary, the author must provide certain evidences as stated above in order to consider the argument to be credible.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 265 350
No. of Characters: 1386 1500
No. of Different Words: 133 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.035 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.23 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.37 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.189 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.405 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.602 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 265.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38113207547 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44157067375 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 204.123752495 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509433962264 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.023028763 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0666666667 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 5.70786347227 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162220960622 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657181466236 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838825184133 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930321076496 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460712053017 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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