The following appeared in an editorial in a business magazine.
"Although the sales of Whirlwind video games have declined over the past two years, a recent survey of video-game players suggests that this sales trend is about to be reversed. The survey asked video-game players what features they thought were most important in a video game. According to the survey, players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics, which require the most up-to-date computers. Whirlwind has just introduced several such games with an extensive advertising campaign directed at people ten to twenty-five years old, the age-group most likely to play video games. It follows, then, that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument seems well explained and logical at first glance but when we reached to the conclusion mentioned in last line, we found faults. The sales of Whirlwind video game are anxious with decrease in sales of video games. On the basis of a survey they concluded that with launch of lifelike graphics and most up to dated computers, the sells will likely to increase dramatically in the next few months.
Moreover, the writer considers basic assumption that the survey is appropriate, and the reasons are accurate for declining of sell. The selling of any product is one of the challenges because competition is very high. There are so many factors responsible for selling of product such as quality of products, need of product, availability, performance of seller and soon. It may plausible that the graphics are okay for customers but there are competitors which sells the same product in low-cost or the selling department is not active in selling. The company must analyses the difficulty in reduced sells of the video games.
Furthermore, mostly ten years to twenty-five years old people spend their time in playing video games. Among this age group most of the people don't have earning sources and they are depended on family for their needs. It is difficult for them to purchase the video games. If the Whirlwind launches the new graphics, then it will be costlier and more required up to dated computer system. In that case the sell of video game will reduce significantly higher that is now. Before taking steps, the company should understand the logical analysis.
Additionally, the sells will likely to increase dramatically means there is surety but the logics behind surety is not appropriate. It may be possible that in next few months there is not season of video games. People play video games specially when they are free from studies like in summer break or winter break and the author did not mentioned or considered the market conditions of next few months. To launch new product or strategies of sells the sells department should discuss market conditions and worst-case scenario of the products.
To sum up all, Whirlwind company just want to increase the sells again without any solid actions. They should survey the market and on the basis of analysis took the steps. The aforementioned reasons show flaws of the given argument shown in editorial of business magazine.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 402 350
No. of Characters: 1959 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.478 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.873 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.563 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.402 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.279 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...Among this age group most of the people dont have earning sources and they are depen...
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Line 7, column 338, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
... or winter break and the author did not mentioned or considered the market conditions of ...
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Line 7, column 453, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sells'' or 'sell's'?
Suggestion: sells'; sell's
... new product or strategies of sells the sells department should discuss market condit...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 401.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00748129676 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62947922251 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511221945137 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1968288268 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.619047619 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0952380952 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165379342644 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544694876157 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699293452972 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976288315746 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431459358244 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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