The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a journal on environmental issues."Over the past year, the Crust Copper Company (CCC) has purchased over 10,000 square miles of land in the tropical nation of West Fredonia. Mining copper on this land wi

According to this letter, the editor tells us the Crust Copper Company purchased a large land in the tropical nation West Fredonia in order to mine the copper underground. Given there are both possiblities of pollution and enviromental disaster, the editor advises not to buy the prodcuts made with CCC's copper thus they will abandon mining plans. The author's suggestion is kind-hearted while not supported by his evidence sufficiently. So let's evaluate them carefully.

To begin with, there is no obvious evidence to prove the enviromental will be undermined by the 10,000 square miles lands' developing. The author does not tell us how many lands to be used as the mining place May be there is just small place to mine copper, thus without the scale of the copper mine, we can not make further conclusion about the potential hazard.

Secondly, the location is not mentioned in this letter. We know that it would be precarious for the envrioment especially for the endagered species that the copper mine is located in their habitats. Without location, maybe CCC purchase the land where is totally wild and free of danger to the envrioment and endangered species.To support his conclusion, the editor should make a specific survey of the CCC's plan and the West Fredonia's geomitric pattern. What's more, compared with the nation's scale, we have no conception of this land in the partion of the country. Maybe the 10,000 land occupies a trivial scale where the plalce was abadoned for decades. I belive there is lots of work to do for the editor to research this country besides the CCC.

Finally, the recommendation is not promised to have this predication that the CCC will abadon its mining plans. The author suggests that if the consumers refuse to buy the product of copper made by CCC, they will stop this plan. While there is no relavance between this boycott and the abadon. Firstly, without the imformation of CCC we do not what scale it is ,maybe it is just a small business of Wets Fredonia's copper mine in the company, there are other mines which the CCC holds except for West Fredonia. Moreover, there is a high possiblity that the copper prodcuts are not easily to be boycotted due to the scale of the company as the company may be the major one. On the othe hand, from the point of CCC, there may be a comprehensive plan that they have already take the presvervation of envrioment and ecndangered species into consideration due to the potential pollution and envriomental disaster.

In conclusion ,the editor's suggestion is not well supported by the evidence he shows to us. To make futhur support, he should find out the location and condition of the country to prove the potential hazard as well as the CCC's specific plan about this copper mine.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, except for, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 474.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85021097046 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65144217963 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470464135021 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5861997529 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.95 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327433808619 0.218282227539 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989787589846 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927925054876 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191385315768 0.128457276422 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707733700515 0.0628817314937 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Sentence: Given there are both possiblities of pollution and enviromental disaster, the editor advises not to buy the prodcuts made with CCC's copper thus they will abandon mining plans.
Error: possiblities Suggestion: possibilities
Error: prodcuts Suggestion: products
Error: enviromental Suggestion: environmental

Sentence: The author's suggestion is kind-hearted while not supported by his evidence sufficiently.
Error: kind-hearted Suggestion: kindhearted

Sentence: To begin with, there is no obvious evidence to prove the enviromental will be undermined by the 10,000 square miles lands' developing.
Error: enviromental Suggestion: environmental

Sentence: We know that it would be precarious for the envrioment especially for the endagered species that the copper mine is located in their habitats.
Error: envrioment Suggestion: environment
Error: endagered Suggestion: endangered

Sentence: Without location, maybe CCC purchase the land where is totally wild and free of danger to the envrioment and endangered species.To support his conclusion, the editor should make a specific survey of the CCC's plan and the West Fredonia's geomitric pattern.
Error: envrioment Suggestion: environment
Error: geomitric Suggestion: geometric

Sentence: What's more, compared with the nation's scale, we have no conception of this land in the partion of the country.
Error: partion Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: Maybe the 10,000 land occupies a trivial scale where the plalce was abadoned for decades.
Error: plalce Suggestion: place
Error: abadoned Suggestion: abandoned

Sentence: I belive there is lots of work to do for the editor to research this country besides the CCC.
Error: belive Suggestion: believe

Sentence: Finally, the recommendation is not promised to have this predication that the CCC will abadon its mining plans.
Error: abadon Suggestion: abandon

Sentence: While there is no relavance between this boycott and the abadon.
Error: abadon Suggestion: abandon
Error: relavance Suggestion: relevance

Sentence: Firstly, without the imformation of CCC we do not what scale it is ,maybe it is just a small business of Wets Fredonia's copper mine in the company, there are other mines which the CCC holds except for West Fredonia.
Error: imformation Suggestion: information

Sentence: Moreover, there is a high possiblity that the copper prodcuts are not easily to be boycotted due to the scale of the company as the company may be the major one.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: prodcuts Suggestion: products
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility

Sentence: On the othe hand, from the point of CCC, there may be a comprehensive plan that they have already take the presvervation of envrioment and ecndangered species into consideration due to the potential pollution and envriomental disaster.
Error: othe Suggestion: other
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: envrioment Suggestion: environment
Error: presvervation Suggestion: preservation
Error: ecndangered Suggestion: endangered
Error: envriomental Suggestion: environmental

Sentence: To make futhur support, he should find out the location and condition of the country to prove the potential hazard as well as the CCC's specific plan about this copper mine.
Error: futhur Suggestion: author

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 21 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 475 350
No. of Characters: 2250 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.668 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.737 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.595 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.99 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.505 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5