The memo from mayor of Brindleburg to the city council suggests building a golf course and resort hotel similar to that of Seaside vista city. It assumes that this will increase tax revenue. The Mayor mentioned several arguments for supporting this prediction. However, the arguments which support the recommendation are themselves flawed.
To begin with, author mentioned that since the inauguration of golf course there is a 20% increase in number of people who visit city of Seaside Vista. It is implicitly assumed here that the main reason for increment in visitors is only because of new golf course and resort. But no significant information about the fact being true is mentioned. An insight on why these people visit the Seaside Vista city could have been very helpful for drawing conclusions. There can be numerous reasons for people to visit the city. They can come to vista city for business purpose only, as it is mentioned that new business loans application have significantly increased. So these people involved in setting up a new business do not have much concern or leisure time for recreational activities. The content on the Seaside Vista in memo, gives an idea that economy of city is progressive and thus the visitors might be the people who come to city seeking jobs. Some statics on people, who visit the Seaside Vista city keeping golf course or the resort as main center of their trip could have been viable for the argument.
Moreover, there is no trust worthy fact establishing the relation between increasing new business loan applications, and golf course & hotel. The growth in new business might be merely organic. Some business might have been boosted by the new premises of city. But no fact explaining that whole growth was solely based on it is mentioned. The author has neglected other factors that facilitate growth of new business. The city council could have approved low tax policies or some campaign to attract new business in the area might have been going on. Explicitly excluding such contributing factors is missing in the argument.
In addition, increase in tax collection definitely has some contribution from the golf course and resort, but again, argument is susceptible to fact that the aggregate increase cannot be coming from only one source. The mayor has assumed that increased sum of tax is coming from golf course and hotel solely. Instead the banks can be major contributors in increased tax revenue. Or the new business. Some information pointing towards increase in tax to be especially sourced from golf course and resort would have eliminated such uncertainty.
Conclusively, A detailed probe is in demand before taking any significant actions. Given facts, only suggest that same implementation might help Brindleburg to gain more tax and revitalize their infrastructure but are untrustworthy for taking further steps.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...iness loan applications, and golf course hotel. The growth in new business might ...
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Suggestion:
...ting factors is missing in the argument. In addition, increase in tax collection ...
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Suggestion: Instead,
...ming from golf course and hotel solely. Instead the banks can be major contributors in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2424.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 470.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15744680851 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76484101855 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474468085106 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2590590715 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2307692308 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0769230769 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65384615385 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.20758483034 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280899156671 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839880712091 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952796886088 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153203130087 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891692233102 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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