The following appeared in a memo from the Mayor of the city of Hillview: " In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, whi

In the following memo the mayor of the city of Hillview has requested the city council to authorize a huge campaign to attract a giant automobile company to build its automobile manufacturing plant. To explain the need of doing so the mayor has taken support of few fact. He has said that the land of city will a perfect site for the plant as it undeveloped for decades. Company will be having no issue with the staffing and building since thosands of residents here are unemployed. But these all facts are not giving conviencible reasons and conduce some questions about the conclusion. So, it would be perfunctory to accept the request before answering to those questions.

First, mayor of the city has said that the landfill of the city has remained undeveloped for decades. And deduced that it is a perfect location for the plant. But why the land has remained undeveloped for such a long period of time? It could be possible that the land is not compatible with the constructions. And maybe the natural disasters like earthquake stromes and volcanos are the common consequences there. Mayor should look for the reasons behind the undevelopement of the land.

Second, mayor has stated that the company will have no problem in staffing and building. For the building the authenticity of the land should be checked first but how staffing is not a problem. In the explanation ahead he has said that the large number of unemployeds is in the city because a comupter software programming company has abandoned his facility last year. But how many numbers of unemployed are there. Is that mass is enough for a new company staff. Are they all compatible with the mechanical manufacturing based company? Since they have left an IT firm may be they are totally unaware of the mechanical firm knowledge.

And last but not least, mayor has requested for the substantive tax incentives to delude the company. But what if company established a plant and unemployment problem is still there. What if the company is about to make a fully automated plant. Mayor should look for the possibilities.

Summing up, if the tax incentives and other policies are needed to attreact the automobile company;it is also needed to look for the possibilities weather the land is good for plant establishment. Will the problem of unemployement be solved. All the unemployeds are able to work there or not? . )

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 263, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun fact seems to be countable; consider using: 'few facts'.
Suggestion: few facts
...doing so the mayor has taken support of few fact. He has said that the land of city will...
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Line 3, column 218, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...as remained undeveloped for such a long period of time? It could be possible that the land is ...
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Line 5, column 537, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mechanical manufacturing based company? Since they have left an IT firm may be they a...
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Line 5, column 558, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
...ing based company? Since they have left an IT firm may be they are totally unaware of...
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Line 5, column 564, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'firms'?
Suggestion: firms
...sed company? Since they have left an IT firm may be they are totally unaware of the ...
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Line 5, column 569, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...ompany? Since they have left an IT firm may be they are totally unaware of the mechani...
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Line 9, column 294, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...mployeds are able to work there or not? .
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'then']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.243735763098 0.25644967241 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.175398633257 0.15541462614 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0774487471526 0.0836205057962 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0410022779043 0.0520304965353 79% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0273348519362 0.0272364105082 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123006833713 0.125424944231 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0478359908884 0.0416121511921 115% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8563411904 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0250569476082 0.026700313972 94% => OK
Particles: 0.00227790432802 0.001811407834 126% => OK
Determiners: 0.136674259681 0.113004496875 121% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0227790432802 0.0255425247493 89% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0113895216401 0.0127820249294 89% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2390.0 2731.13054187 88% => OK
No of words: 406.0 446.07635468 91% => OK
Chars per words: 5.88669950739 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.320197044335 0.378187486979 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.258620689655 0.287650121315 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.179802955665 0.208842608468 86% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.120689655172 0.135150697306 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8563411904 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 207.018472906 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463054187192 0.469332199767 99% => OK
Word variations: 49.8005367549 52.1807786196 95% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.039408867 135% => OK
Sentence length: 15.037037037 23.2022227129 65% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0915931568 57.7814097925 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5185185185 141.986410481 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.037037037 23.2022227129 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.37037037037 0.724660767414 51% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 40.8991060026 51.9672348444 79% => OK
Elegance: 1.70093457944 1.8405768891 92% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477457578195 0.441005458295 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.100820021169 0.135418324435 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0938529097597 0.0829849096947 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.498489799662 0.58762219726 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.168026424371 0.147661913831 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180327142538 0.193483328276 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119976264376 0.0970749176394 124% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.496548822347 0.42659136922 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0855229004028 0.0774707102158 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.340474295088 0.312017818177 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797008527598 0.0698173142475 114% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.82512315271 228% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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