In the given memo, from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States indicates that domestic cheeses are more in deman so they need to be predilected in making them instead of all varieties of cheese. To buttress his/her argument he stated that among all the cheeses at their newest store in domestic cheddar cheeses from Winsconsin were sold more in amount. So, he recommended to stock only domestic cheese to sell. However, to properly evaluated his argument he needs to address certain quandaries and give more explanations regarding it.
First of all, along with the time preference of people about food and things do change. In other words, if people prefer to have all different varieties of cheese at the moment which might be change in future with only having domestic cheese and otherwise. For example, perphaps people might have bought only bought domestic cheeses in this recent time might be their affinity towards the authenticity of that place. They probably preffered to buy cheese from that particular place instead of other imported cheese to inordr to get familiar with their own cities aunthentic and real taste.If the above point has some merit, than the original argument is enervated.
Secondly, data about preferences of people about their interest and their food preferences are ever changing thing. The owner blindly believes in the data from the survey by Cheese of the World magazine for people's preferences for domestic cheese. For instance, that survey might be correct for ten years of period of time and after a certain point other group of people would probably want imported cheese. If the above is true, than the argument doesn't hold any water.
Lastly, people's penchant for the domestic cheese might be because of the high price of the imported cheese. If company would cut their prices on other stuffs and focus on making reasonable price for even imported cheese than people might buy them as well so their sale won't be in exiguous amount.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is based on the several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to offer more explanations regarding the above quandaries with systematic flow of research than it possible for the proposed memo to be viable to concentrate in production of domestic cheese.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 390 350
No. of Characters: 1901 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.444 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.874 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.459 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.539 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.354 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 422, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
...ds the authenticity of that place. They probably preffered to buy cheese from that particular plac...
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Line 2, column 589, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...ir own cities aunthentic and real taste.If the above point has some merit, than th...
^^
Line 2, column 624, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
...aste.If the above point has some merit, than the original argument is enervated. Se...
^^^^
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thing. The owner blindly believes in the data from the survey by Cheese of the Wo...
^^
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...urvey might be correct for ten years of period of time and after a certain point other group o...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 315, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...might be correct for ten years of period of time and after a certain point other ...
^^
Line 3, column 432, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
... imported cheese. If the above is true, than the argument doesnt hold any water. La...
^^^^
Line 3, column 450, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...If the above is true, than the argument doesnt hold any water. Lastly, peoples pencha...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01554404145 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50284275541 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497409326425 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1503626461 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.125 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.70786347227 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294003862853 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102155958891 0.0743258471296 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0994620417035 0.0701772020484 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152914970937 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0974474761638 0.0628817314937 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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