The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
While the recommendation of the author, adducing shorter work shifts and lower on-the-job at the nearby plant, for reduing working hours of employees at Quiot Manufacturing may sound plausible at first sight, a closer review sheds light on a plethora of understated assumptions in the arguments. These invalid assumptions could dampen the effectiveness of the president\'s proposal.
To begin with, the author assumes a causal relationship between shorter working hours and lower on-the-job accidents at Panoply Industries plant. No concrete evidence, however, are provided to substantiate the correlation between the two. There are many factors that can contribute to low on-the-job accidents. For instance, the machines at Panoply Industries plant are more up-to-date and safer to the operators. It is also not impossible that workers at Panoply Industries plant are more skilled and experienced, preventing them from making mistakes at works. Before answering these questions and others alike, the author is too reckless to conclude that shorter work shifts equals to lower accident rate.
Additionally, the validity of the comparison made by the author is itself questionable. In the memo, the vice president only metioned the proximity in location between Quiot Manufacturing and Panoly Industries plant; nonetheless, this does not necessarily mean that there are similarities between the two entities. Imaginably, if Quiot Manufacturing makes furniture, and Panoply Industries plant assembles digital divices like cell phones, then it would not be so surprising that employees at Quiot Manufacturing suffer more from on-the-job accidents. Were the president to figure the real problems that leads to this high rate of accidents, he or she would need to compare Quiot with other manufacturers that make similar products.
Last but not least, even though longer work shifts does lead to more on-the-job accidents, the decision made by the president to reduce work shifts at Quiot Manufacturing by one hour is still ungrounded. Again, the author here posits that this policy would provide employees with the same amounts of rest and sleep as those at Panoply Industries plant, thus lowering the number of on-the-job accidents. Enough rest is necessary, but it is not expected to totally follow the practice at the nearby plant. The author should be aware of the differences between the two factories and make decisions based on the real needs of employees at Quiot Manufacturing.
In conclusion, it might be true that Quiot Manufacturing ought to shorten the work shifts to prevent workers getting to fatigue, as an effort to avoid on-the-job accidents as many as possible. But the author\'s arguments are built upon some assumptions that are not proved to be true, thus severely undermining the potential outcome of the reform.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, then, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2402.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 440.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45909090909 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98228585579 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522727272727 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6275476977 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.444444444 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4444444444 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375294950884 0.218282227539 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115732438139 0.0743258471296 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827179982001 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214477425336 0.128457276422 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589350116052 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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