The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument state that in quiot manufacturing unit the accident are higher in number than other indrustrial plant nearby. The author forget to mentioned the several key features on which the ramification of the argument would depend on. The argument has been flawed due the following reasons.
Firstly the author failed to mention the number of hours employees are working in the plant. there might be possibility, employeers are only working for six hours a day. working six hours a day is not the hectic work, employees can easily make the work life balance. And reducing further more one hour will be five hours which is very less, manufacturing unit has to see the profit and meet the market expectation. Simply reducing one hours in the worker shift will not help him to find the solution.
Secondly, quiot Maufacturing and panoply indrustrial plant both work in the different sector. may be the panoply industry plan not use any equipments that are being utilised by the quiot manufacturing. The equipment used by the employees in quiot manufacturing has become rustic, employee are having difficulty in using equipments. then the quiot management has to replace the old eqipment will the new one. might be that the training for how to use the equipment has not being didactic properly to the employees. proper training for the employees about the safety and how to handle machinary item properly could help the employee.
In the last, by decreasing the shift timing by 1 hour, what is the possibility that employee will take a rest. possiblity is that employee may indulge himself in some other activity,Like the watching movies, doing late night parties, or may some other business work. author fail to mention the workload of the quito manufacturing unit, may be the employeers are not getting fatigue because of work. employeers has have some family issue or some other internal problem like wage. Beacuse of it employees are thinking about the problem and not able to concentrate on the work efficiently. we can also infer that employee does not have the proper place to sleep, may be they don't have house or the house is pilthy, there were lot of mosquito, which are biting them. And should not be able to sleep properly. In this case, management should provide the proper place to sleep.
due to the above mentioned factor the agrumnet has been flawed and unconvincing. To get the proper analysis on this we need more factors to look into. Untill then this is open for debate.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2024 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.762 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.518 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.91 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.299 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.595 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: higher
...iot manufacturing unit the accident are higher in number than other indrustrial plant nearby. Th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...cation of the argument would depend on. The argument has been flawed due the follow...
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Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...urs employees are working in the plant. there might be possibility, employeers are on...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Working
...s are only working for six hours a day. working six hours a day is not the hectic work,...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one hour', 'an hour', or simply 'hours'?
Suggestion: one hour; an hour; hours
...the market expectation. Simply reducing one hours in the worker shift will not help him t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 472, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help him find' instead.
Suggestion: help him find
... one hours in the worker shift will not help him to find the solution. Secondly, quiot Maufac...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: May
...lant both work in the different sector. may be the panoply industry plan not use an...
^^^
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Then
... having difficulty in using equipments. then the quiot management has to replace the...
^^^^
Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Might
...lace the old eqipment will the new one. might be that the training for how to use the...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 515, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Proper
...ing didactic properly to the employees. proper training for the employees about the sa...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Possiblity
...ibility that employee will take a rest. possiblity is that employee may indulge himself in...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 182, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Like
...y indulge himself in some other activity,Like the watching movies, doing late night p...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 268, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
...rties, or may some other business work. author fail to mention the workload of the qui...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 400, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Employeers
...re not getting fatigue because of work. employeers has have some family issue or some othe...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 415, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...fatigue because of work. employeers has have some family issue or some other interna...
^^^^
Line 7, column 588, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...to concentrate on the work efficiently. we can also infer that employee does not h...
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Line 7, column 661, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...oes not have the proper place to sleep, may be they dont have house or the house is pi...
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Line 7, column 673, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... the proper place to sleep, may be they dont have house or the house is pilthy, ther...
^^^^
Line 7, column 683, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'housed'.
Suggestion: housed
...r place to sleep, may be they dont have house or the house is pilthy, there were lot ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Due
...d provide the proper place to sleep. due to the above mentioned factor the agrum...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2080.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 423.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91725768322 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.612414019 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496453900709 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4127161422 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.2 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.92 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174354398965 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516101944912 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527628280742 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0942079468892 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056536109918 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.3799401198 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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