The author's tried to Shaw that, to make a higher profit and faster growth, the executives should sleep less that 6 hours which is not so impressive as in the argument stated. First of all, the advertising firm assumed that the number of surveyed person is enough for came out this type of conclussion. Their might be a large number of executives who are successful in their field who sleeps more than 6 hours.
The author also assumed that sleep is the only factor which is influencing executives workibility. There may be other factors which might be valid reason for their for their higher profit margins as well as faster growth of the company. Somehow the advertising firm didn't mention about executives skills and expertise which might helping them to become successful. They just assumed that, sleeping is the only factor for successful executives.
At the very end, the argument stated that an executives sleeping only 6 hours can make a business profitable and helps to grow faster. But it failed to state that, other factors such as business strategies, risk on that on that business and other management effect which might influence the business.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 318, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...his type of conclussion. Their might be a large number of executives who are successful in their ...
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Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'for their'.
Suggestion: for their
...her factors which might be valid reason for their for their higher profit margins as well as faster...
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Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e company. Somehow the advertising firm didnt mention about executives skills and exp...
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Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'on that'.
Suggestion: on that
...ctors such as business strategies, risk on that on that business and other management effect wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, so, well, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 55.5748502994 31% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 968.0 2260.96107784 43% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 195.0 441.139720559 44% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9641025641 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 4.56307096286 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56189648688 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 204.123752495 54% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564102564103 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 290.7 705.55239521 41% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7595394802 57.8364921388 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.555555556 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130250349325 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611859631933 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378896799498 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981056445189 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0269012311543 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 98.500998004 37% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.