The following appeared as a recommendation by a committee planning a ten year budget for the city of Calatrava The birthrate in our city is declining in fact last year s birthrate was only one half that of five years ago Thus the number of students enroll

According tot the recommendation written by a committe that holds in charge of a ten-year budget for Calatrava, a lot of fundings can be saved to invest in the facilities for the adults, since the numbers of babies and children are declining. However, such arguement, despite its superficial cogency, requires further discoveries and analyses of more evidence to become valid.

The first evidence to be examined is the demographic movements of the city's population. The arguement constructed above naively assumes as if the city itself is a closed system by itself. However, a substantial amount of people in fact move in and out of the city. Thus, if the city is currently witnessing a lot of people moving into the city from the adjacent ones, the committee has to re-evaluate the plan, for such incoming people can alter the current local dynamics of the population. More potential families with young children might come into the city to enjoy the programs and facilities with bigger spaces and rooms than what their previous cities offer. Furthermore, the adults, especially the working ages, might tend to go out, seeking for job oppportunities outside of the city. These such potential movemenets of the people, if they do exist continuously, would in fact invalidate the reasoning suggested by the committee.

Another evidence one has to evaluate is the more extensive statistics in regard to the local birthrate. The passage insists that the current birthrate is half of what they have compiled the five years ago. The committee has to not only obtain but also analyze the more exhaustive ones, atleast the ones that show the last five years' birthrates, because the city might have seen a peculiarly high birthrates five years ago that could have served as an anomaly. Furthermore, the overall declining trend of the birthrate could be in fact very minimal; curtailing a huge sum of the funds for the younger people in this case could be rather a unnecessarily bombastic reaction and thus may not be justified. Clearly, it is crucial to parse the overall trend of the birthrate decline.

Lastly, the committee has to check who consist the dominant customers of the atheltic and reactional facilties whose funds the passage believes it is reasonable to reduce. The author of the passage has concluded such, based on the belief that the younger customers are the main visitors of these amenities. However, this belief is precariously flawed: the adults and even the elders enjoy attending to the sports facilties and other physical activities. In fact, in some cases, the adults show a higher proclivity of consistently attending to those faciltiies more than the younger people who lack stabilities of occupations and schedules. If it comes out that a significant number of adults also use the atheletic faciltiies, the passage loses its strength.

To wrap it up, although the passage has equipped itself with evidence, it has failed to purvey a convincing arguement. With its lack of sound reasonings and robust evidence, it is too foolhardy to conclude that the passage comes valid. Depending on the discoveries as well as implications of more evidence, the passage's validity gets shored upor weakened in the long run.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 754, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... ages, might tend to go out, seeking for job oppportunities outside of the city. ...
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Line 5, column 637, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ger people in this case could be rather a unnecessarily bombastic reaction and th...
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Line 9, column 312, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'passages'' or 'passage's'?
Suggestion: passages'; passage's
...l as implications of more evidence, the passages validity gets shored upor weakened in t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, so, thus, well, as to, in fact, as well as, in regard to, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2710.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 531.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10357815443 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82714032156 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 204.123752495 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510357815443 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 869.4 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9567108414 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.181818182 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1363636364 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263527160566 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601299695777 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789898866902 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123054017425 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110783786961 0.0628817314937 176% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 98.500998004 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 20 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 531 350
No. of Characters: 2643 1500
No. of Different Words: 261 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.8 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.977 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.747 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 112 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 78 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.136 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.137 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.682 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.299 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5