The author of the prompt has argued that colds are the primary cause of absenteeism. Consequently, the author agues that people should eat more plant benefecia to reduce colds and thus to reduce absenteeism. Such an argument is weak for a number of reasons that shall be discussed below in this essay.
The primary factor that undermines the author's argument is that the author makes the unwarranted assumption that absenteeism in schools and workplaces is a result of catching colds. For this assumption to be deemed valid, surveys need to be conducted. That is, abseentees need to be asked as to why they do not show up for work/school. Indeed, it is very much possible that people remain absent for a host of other reasons which have no relation to catching colds or even being sick. Moreover, none of us are certain that the colds in question are so weakening that they prevent people from being present in their works. Accordingly, the assumption that the cold is primarily responsible for absenteeism cannot be taken at face value, unless appropriate surveys are conducted.
In addition to conducting surveys, the authorities should also consider the quality of workplaces/schools in relation to absenteeism. That is, do workplaces/schools have proper environments that would encourage the workforce/pupils to attend to them. For one thing, people are more likely to prefer their homes than the workplace/schools if the latter do not provide a friendly atmosphere. For example, a pupil is less likely to attend school if he or she has to constantly put up with bullying from his or her class mates. Similarly, an employee is less likely to attend the workplace if he or she has constant brawls with the authorities of public offices. Thus it is imperative to investigate the environmental quality of workplaces/schools in relation to absenteeism.
Finally, it is also important to evaluate the workload of workplaces/schools and see if the daily workload is discouraging people from appearing in schools/workplaces. Indeed, a hectic workload can easily tire the everyday worker/pupil, such that he or she simply does not have the energy to show up to their respective offices; staying at home becomes a better option consequently. A number of surveys thus need to be conducted in order to find out whether the heavy workload is a discouraging factor in appearing for work.
Overall, it is clear from the points raised in this essay that the cold cannot simply be assumed to be the cause of absenteeism. A host of other factors, such as the environmental quality of workplaces/schools and the latter's daily workload, can contribute to the absenteeism in question; the only way to find out the actual cause of absenteeism is by surveying the population in question.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: That is, abseentees need to be asked as to why they do not show up for work/school.
Error: abseentees Suggestion: absentees
flaws:
the arguments are not correct.
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Let's analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:
condition 1:
A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where consumption of the plant beneficia is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of beneficia can prevent colds.
//maybe there are other reasons for less visit to doctors in East Meria, like: people over there do exercise often
condition 2:
Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of nutritional supplements derived from beneficia.
//suppose it works, but maybe it works only for East Meria, not West Meria.
conclusion:
We predict this will dramatically reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces.
//suppose it works for West Meria too, but it doesn't mean it will dramatically reduce absenteeism in schools and workplaces.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: ? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 466 350
No. of Characters: 2262 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.646 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.854 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.772 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.3 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.121 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.541 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.142 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 40, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... The primary factor that undermines the authors argument is that the author makes the u...
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Line 5, column 660, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...with the authorities of public offices. Thus it is imperative to investigate the env...
^^^^
Line 5, column 759, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ity of workplaces/schools in relation to absenteeism. Finally, it is also imp...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, finally, if, moreover, similarly, so, thus, as to, for example, in addition, such as, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2328.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 456.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10526315789 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30868948847 2.78398813304 119% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460526315789 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5789800248 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.4 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0774278492049 0.218282227539 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0275832115673 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0246618157201 0.0701772020484 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0477463109269 0.128457276422 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00983007587769 0.0628817314937 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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