The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.
"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because online instruction takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased. Thus, to increase enrollment and solve the problem of budget deficits at Humana University, we should initiate and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni."
The president of the Humana University has purposed that for dealing with the financial issue and decreased enrollment, the university should provide the online education service as the Omni University. This plan is flawed since the author draws a conclusion based on a vague and irrelevant assumption.
First, the author makes a mistake while provides an unfounded link between the increase of online courses and decrease of dorm and class used in the Omni University. There is no cogent and reliable clue to back this relationship. For instance, the increment of the online class can be for the sake of increase of the number of students, who wish the get the academic education in the university, in this case, the number student enrollment will be boosted in the ordinary class too. Furthermore, the decrease in the expenditures of dorms and class does not prove that the number of enrollments has been declined. There is the possibility that the dormitory does not provide the required service and rarely satisfies the students; thus, students are eager to live off campus instead of dorms. Or about the class space usage, there is feasibility that capacity of courses has been altered; as an example, meanwhile, in the past, a course was held in five classes with 20 student capacity; now it is two classes with 50 capacity. So, then there is no variation in students’ enrollment, but the number using classes are reduced.
Secondly, even if there is decrement of enrollment in the classes, the proposal is flawed when it relates this incidence to the increase of online courses. Indeed, there is no concrete evidence and data to represent that these online classes cause this event. Maybe the syllabus of courses provided in the ordinary classes is not interesting and updated; consequently, students refute to take and participate in these classes. On the other hand, the program provided in the online courses is completely matched with the current trend of occupation. As a result, students prefer to take an online course. So, as long as the president does not provide justice and sufficient data about the similarity of two programs provided in both classes, linking these two events is a faint task.
Finally, in a case that all above-discussed rejected surmises were valid, the hypothesis that online courses in the Humana University will aid it to solve its economic crisis is also shaky and ungrounded. In fact, the prompt does not mention to any financial profits that the Omni University gets from the online classes, besides, there is no information about whether this profit fulfill the university's demand or not. As a result, there is no rearing data to warrantee that the Humana University will profit effectively through the online classes to cover its entire costs. Even the Omni University does cover its expenses from this way, there are no guarantees either that Humana University would do the same since there are two districted universities about which there are no clues of similarity.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons and rejected assumptions explicitly depict that the president does mistake to compare two universities and believe that the Humana University can handle its current problems if it acts same as the Omni University. The proposal is verified in a case that whole discussed issues are addressed reasonably.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 554 350
No. of Characters: 2753 1500
No. of Different Words: 247 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.852 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.969 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.695 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 203 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 158 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.983 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.526 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, for instance, in fact, of course, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2825.0 2260.96107784 125% => OK
No of words: 554.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09927797834 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80009748891 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 204.123752495 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454873646209 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 928.8 705.55239521 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3523244086 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.523809524 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.380952381 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218068763063 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663831212099 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514161725062 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129335313248 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213882627154 0.0628817314937 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 98.500998004 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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