The following report appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council
An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds represent the most frequently given reason for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid—a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil—as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
In this report, the author of the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council claims that citizens of West Meria should daily use Ichthaid-a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil to lower absenteeism by preventing cold. To support her argument she cites a study which was conducted in East Meria show that the people of East Meria visit doctor once or twice a year and the amount of fish consumption of East Meria is very high. And she assumes that Ichthaid which However, careful scrutiny reveals that this argument has several logical flaws.
To begin with, based on the study which indicates that the lower number of visiting doctor is related to the amount of fish consumption, she hastily assumes that the eating many fish can prevent cold. However, there is a possibility that the reason of lower occurrence of cold in East Meria is not because of eating substantial amount of fish. For example, genetic characteristics of people in East Meria naturally have benefit of preventing cold or another outside factor such as clear atmosphere or water could affect the lower frequency of visiting doctor. If this is true, this argument is not persuasive.
Secondly, even if we admit the fish consumption affect people's health, there is another problem. Based on the only fact that Ichthaid is derived from fish oil, she wrongly assumes that the supplement show same effect with natural fish. Common sense tells us that even if an artificial chemical comes from natural chemical, only one or little change in chemical trait gives large different effect the artificial chemical. For example, many steroid drugs show big chemical similarity with Testosterone or Estrogen, but they give side effect to human body. If she cannot explain why she thinks the Ichthaid shows same effect of natural fish oil, this argument is not cogent.
Finally, even if other problem is true, there is another critical problem. She hastily assumes that the only reason why people are absent is cold. However, this might not be true. There are many reason why people do absent. For example, rush hour or overslept can be reason of absenteeism or even, another disease such as headache, stomaches can be reason. If this is true, we cannot be convinced by this argument.
To summarize, this argument is still dubious as it stands. To make this argument more strong, the author have to show us data about cause of lower number of visiting doctor in East Meria and show that there is no difference in effect of Ichthaid with natural fish. To rate this argument better, we have to know that the exact reason of absenteeism in West Meria
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 444 350
No. of Characters: 2130 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.59 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.797 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.388 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.467 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.531 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.19 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 478, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...igh. And she assumes that Ichthaid which However, careful scrutiny reveals that t...
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Line 7, column 416, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e cannot be convinced by this argument. To summarize, this argument is still dub...
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Line 9, column 266, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...n effect of Ichthaid with natural fish. To rate this argument better, we have to k...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93018018018 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45133939063 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448198198198 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7670996824 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.238095238 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0977314101657 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0303812628985 0.0743258471296 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512491422881 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0663488673998 0.128457276422 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0669931213443 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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