An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
An international development organization proposed to cultivate a new breed of millet containig high Vitamin A to fight vitamin A deficiency in Tagusa and the proposal here is that the goverment should promote it to fight the current situation. This proposal is based on several assumptions. Lets judge the merit of these assumptions to makes a cogent decision.
Here, in the prose it is said that the seeds of the new millet breed are bit more costly. But to encourage the farmers, farming this millet breed will be subsidised. Here the assumption is that the subsidy amount will be good enough to sway the farmers into cultivating the breed. There is no information about the growth of this breed, the amount that can be farmed from the same amount of land compared to the existing breed. The oppotunity cost is the main issue here. If the breed takes more time to grow then the existing breed and the price is not high enough, the farmers might not be interested in it. Also, if the amount of new breed millet grown is significantly less than the existing breed in the same amount of cultivated land, this might discourage the farmers. Thus this questions need to be answered before adopting the new breed and divert goverment fund to promote it. So, this things need to be taken in cosideration before opting for the new breed.
Again, it is said that the new breed of millet is rich in vitamin A. But information on the other nutrients are not expressed here. It is possible that the new breed of this seed might lack other necessary nutrients that the existing breed contains. This might result in a negative situation. Also, It is said here that the people of tangus are very familiar with millet. Thus its adoption will be very easy. But, we do not know for sure if the taste of the millet will remain the same. If it is not, then there is high chance that people will not be very interested in the consumption of this new breed.
Although incorporating vitamin A in a staple food looks to be very promising idea, But there are already many successfully established way of delivering vitamin A to the mass people in a very quick time. There are campaigns for feeding vitamin A capsule in Bangladesh, which has been very successful and the whole program is free as it is subsidised by the government. This program did not need any change in the existing infrastructure which reduced the financial burden on the Bangladesh goverment. The government of Tagus can look into such alternatives. Also, before promoting this new breed it has to be made sure that the new breed is actually high enough in vitamin A to make this decison.
To fight the vitamin A deficiency in Tagus, the new breed of millet is a promising idea. But before adopting it and promoting at goverment level, the complete nutrients and the other farming related requirements need to established. Also, if other means of delivering vitamin A is available, their merit also need to be judged. Only after making all these considerations, the goverment should think where it will be beneficial for Tagus to adopt the new breed of millet.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 545 350
No. of Characters: 2512 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.832 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.609 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.612 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.464 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.201 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.536 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.479 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 293, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...oposal is based on several assumptions. Lets judge the merit of these assumptions to...
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Line 3, column 777, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...and, this might discourage the farmers. Thus this questions need to be answered befo...
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Line 3, column 892, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ivert goverment fund to promote it. So, this things need to be taken in cosideration...
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Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...f tangus are very familiar with millet. Thus its adoption will be very easy. But, we...
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Line 7, column 60, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ing vitamin A in a staple food looks to be very promising idea, But there are already many succes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, look, so, then, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.6327345309 188% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2575.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 545.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7247706422 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67418461623 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414678899083 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 813.6 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.2274683335 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7931034483 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7931034483 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.79310344828 5.70786347227 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436513479783 0.218282227539 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127823497116 0.0743258471296 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953819253376 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263009726166 0.128457276422 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349266530512 0.0628817314937 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.3799401198 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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