An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Well the International development organisation's move to improve the well being of Tagus's citizens extremely laudable.Whether this new move will indeed benefit the citizens is dependent on the response to the below set of questions.
Although the new breed of millet is rich in Vitamin A recommendation doesn't say whether its daily average consumption in the nation of Tagus can supplement daily Vitamin A required intake. If this is answered we can be sure that they wont have to rely on any other sources for the Vitamin A and Vitamin A deficiency can be completely eliminated.
The recommendation does not tell us about this new breed of millet has other nutritional deficiency. Say genetic modification increased the Vitamin A but decreased the calcium and iron amounts. If this is the case and people start consuming it; it will help overcome Vitamin A deficiency but will cause iron and calcium problems. So the international development organisation might be blamed for this mistake. So we need to make sure if the new breed just increases the Vitamin A nutritional value and does not hurt any other important nutrition required.
The recommendation does not mention about the long term effects on the land in which the new breed will be cultivated. It doesn't mention anything about the farming requirements such as water levels, pesticides costs etc. If the new breed needs more water and constantly troubled by the pests then farmers will require more pesticides; will the government pay for this too? If yes, then no issues ; else we have one more concern to our list.If the cultivation of this new breed causes the land to degrade the farmers will have to suffer in the long term. All these testing must be done.
I would conclude saying that if the above questions are answered positively then at-least the basic set of concerns will be met positively and the citizens or Tagus can say goodbye to their Vitamin A deficiency.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.272463768116 0.25644967241 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.171014492754 0.15541462614 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0898550724638 0.0836205057962 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0550724637681 0.0520304965353 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0347826086957 0.0272364105082 128% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0985507246377 0.125424944231 79% => OK
Participles: 0.0376811594203 0.0416121511921 91% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.90335045018 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0231884057971 0.026700313972 87% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.11884057971 0.113004496875 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0434782608696 0.0255425247493 170% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00289855072464 0.0127820249294 23% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1946.0 2731.13054187 71% => OK
No of words: 327.0 446.07635468 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.95107033639 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.57801047555 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.308868501529 0.378187486979 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.269113149847 0.287650121315 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.177370030581 0.208842608468 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128440366972 0.135150697306 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90335045018 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 207.018472906 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516819571865 0.469332199767 110% => OK
Word variations: 53.6315636897 52.1807786196 103% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 23.3571428571 23.2022227129 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.830157204 57.7814097925 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.0 141.986410481 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 23.2022227129 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.428571428571 0.724660767414 59% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.58251231527 251% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 50.2684578419 51.9672348444 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.56666666667 1.8405768891 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398225774486 0.441005458295 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.123560774712 0.135418324435 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0857834373741 0.0829849096947 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.610527006381 0.58762219726 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.230986802583 0.147661913831 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161430530029 0.193483328276 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0902985356842 0.0970749176394 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.332301627321 0.42659136922 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0785586535932 0.0774707102158 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251068115532 0.312017818177 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650705350636 0.0698173142475 93% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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