In the letter, the Owner of the Central Plaza asserts that the declination in the number of shoppers if the outcome of increase in the popularity of skateboarding. Thus to increase the count of shoppers the author recommend to prohibit the skateboarding in the Plaza. however the letter is proved to be unconvincing because of lacking of evidences.
First of all, the author delineates a direct relation between the decrease in the number of shoppers and increase in the fame of skateboarding, assuming it to be the absolute reason in the reduction of customers. This assumption seems less cogent as popularity of skateboarding cannot be the only reason behind the less sell. There is a possibility the stocks in Plaza are not proved to be satisfying to the customer and that is why the old customers are not willing to visit again. Another reason for the less shopper can be other equivalent or even better competitors of Central Plaza that the shoppers find more convenient on the basis of cost of the product, services offered,etc. than Plan. There are many such parameters which can be the cause of the decrease in the customer count and skateboarding not even related to it. Therefore, the author required to consider the aforementioned factors in order to bolster the argument.
Likewise, the author claims that the litter and vandalism are found in the Plaza, in-directing mentioned that skateboarding is the cause for this. While giving this,the author put forward the aesthetic requirement of customer. Inadequately, this evidence giving an impression that the author is equivocating in order to buttress his side. Since, the presence of litter and vandalism can also give an indication of poor cleaning service, this point can change in the direction of the argument and can help in the contribution of reduction in the count of shoppers. The author must supply other details that can be the cause of litter and vandalism.
Finally, the author concluded, on this basis of his fallacious evidences that ban of the skateboarding can increase the number of customers and given a prediction that by this step, the Plaza will restore its glory again and get its shoppers back again. But, as the viewpoint of the customer is not declaimed in the argument, this ultimate conclusion result in less cogency.
In summary, the author needs to analyze the issue in detail, considering all the factors such as customer satisfaction, abundance of stock, other competitive shops and so on. The depth of these parameters can help the author to bolster the argument with a rigid conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK, but more arguments
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2112 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.9 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.834 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.087 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.578 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 165, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ase in the popularity of skateboarding. Thus to increase the count of shoppers the a...
^^^^
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend prohibiting'.
Suggestion: recommend prohibiting
...crease the count of shoppers the author recommend to prohibit the skateboarding in the Plaza. however...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...rohibit the skateboarding in the Plaza. however the letter is proved to be unconvincing...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: however,
...rohibit the skateboarding in the Plaza. however the letter is proved to be unconvincing...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 388, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...y the stocks in Plaza are not proved to be satisfying to the customer and that is why the old...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 680, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , etc
...of cost of the product, services offered,etc. than Plan. There are many such paramet...
^^^^
Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...is the cause for this. While giving this,the author put forward the aesthetic requir...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, likewise, so, therefore, thus, while, in summary, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 429.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05128205128 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93119071087 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459207459207 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1455333374 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.388888889 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167589486271 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576709681743 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767062345685 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105634445681 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0922886953265 0.0628817314937 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.