Paleo diets, in which one eats how early hominids (human ancestors) did, are becoming increasingly popular. Proponents claim our bodies evolved to eat these types of food, especially bone broth, a soup made by cooking animal bones for several hours. They believe it has many health-promoting nutrients, such as cartilage, which can heal our joints, and chondroitin, which promotes nerve regeneration. Skeptics point out that ingested cartilage can’t replenish cartilage in your knees or elbows and ingested chondroitin doesn’t make our brains any healthier. Yet, there is strong anecdotal evidence that people who consume bone broth have fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases than those who don’t. Therefore, ancient humans knew something about our physiology that we don’t, and that by emulating the way they ate, we can cure many chronic illnesses.
The argument recommends that having Paleo diets like human ancestors did can cure many chronic illness. However, this argument rests on many unsubstantiated assumptions, and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands.
The memo states that the bone broth which have lots of health-promoting nutrients, sucg as cartilage, can heal our joints, and chondroitin. An assumption here is that these nutrients can truly affect our bodies. However, There is no proof that these nutrients have a beneficial affect to human. For example, If it is good things for people, the author need to provide evidence like the nutrients research or experients. We cannot eat them just because human ancestors ate. We need more information about this issue.
The arthor says that there is strong evidence that people who consume bone broth have fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases than who do not. A supposition here is that people have fewer diseases is because they had these nutrients. Still, we cannot truly know if they have fewer diseases because of Paleo diets. What if people who had Paleo diets ate other food simultaneously? For instance, people usually has lots of vegetable to prevent diseases. It is highly possible that people mentioned by author had fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases is because of other vegetable. Thus, we still need more explanation about this issue.
Finally, the memo suggestes that ancient human knew something about our physiology that we don't. However, it is not persuasive to people to believe because we cannot assure Paleo diets is beneficial to people. Even if Paleo diets can cure many chronic illnesses. We still cannot assert that ancient human knew something about our physiology. Maybe they just like this cooking style, and which is benefical to people by coincidence.
To strengthen the argument, the author would need to address these assumptions.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 303 350
No. of Characters: 1544 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.172 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.096 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.674 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.421 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.156 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 134, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...etabolic and inflammatory diseases than who do not. A supposition here is that peop...
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Line 13, column 92, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... something about our physiology that we dont. However, it is not persuasive to peopl...
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Line 13, column 211, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re Paleo diets is beneficial to people. Even if Paleo diets can cure many chronic illne...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 55.5748502994 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 302.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31125827815 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78107061335 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493377483444 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7592240946 57.8364921388 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.380952381 119.503703932 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.380952381 23.324526521 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156432829616 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486007348554 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342853303263 0.0701772020484 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0824832273073 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397455145555 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.3550499002 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.197005988 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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