The conclusion is that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best choice for any child. The assumption is based on the various factors such as their intensive program, teachers performance with most prestigious ballet companies. However, to to reach the conclusion some other factors also need to validate.
First, it needs to understand the child requirement regarding the dance school, whether he want to learn ballet or not and the importantly on the price. Maybe child wants to learn some other dance form. In that case, we just can't say that Pirouettes is the best choice for the child. If price of the school is very high then most of the students will not be able to afford it.
Also choice is depend on the way he wants to learn, maybe he want to learn dance in more friendly manner and doesn't want to go through the intensive program. Mostly, parent wants their child should learn thing which they enjoy and intensive program will exhaust them. Intensive program may drag away the student from the Pirouettes.
Finally, it has mentioned that many of the students have become professional dancers. However, it hasn't supported in the passage that their success is totally because of the Pirouettes Ballet School. Students have become successful because they have joined another schools after the Pirouettes to enhance their skill. Importantly it hasn't mentioned that student have become professional dancer in ballet or not. Maybe they have opt for another dance form after realizing that they are not good in Ballet. So, there can be many interpretation regarding the assumption.
So whether Pirouettes Ballet School is best choice for any student or not is depends upon many factors like student choice, price ,etc. So to support the argument these factor should have been analyzed.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 300 350
No. of Characters: 1458 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.162 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.86 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.459 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.877 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.58 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 113, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ny child. The assumption is based on the various factors such as their intensive ...
^^
Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
... prestigious ballet companies. However, to to reach the conclusion some other factors...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
... regarding the dance school, whether he want to learn ballet or not and the importan...
^^^^
Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...other dance form. In that case, we just cant say that Pirouettes is the best choice ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 285, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ettes is the best choice for the child. If price of the school is very high then m...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ents will not be able to afford it. Also choice is depend on the way he wants to...
^^^^
Line 5, column 16, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...e able to afford it. Also choice is depend on the way he wants to learn, maybe he ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
... on the way he wants to learn, maybe he want to learn dance in more friendly manner ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 110, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...learn dance in more friendly manner and doesnt want to go through the intensive progra...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 52, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... has mentioned that many of the students have become professional dancers. Howeve...
^^
Line 7, column 100, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...ecome professional dancers. However, it hasnt supported in the passage that their suc...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 335, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
... to enhance their skill. Importantly it hasnt mentioned that student have become prof...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 430, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'opted'.
Suggestion: opted
...ancer in ballet or not. Maybe they have opt for another dance form after realizing ...
^^^
Line 7, column 516, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t they are not good in Ballet. So, there can be many interpretation regarding the...
^^
Line 7, column 525, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun interpretation seems to be countable; consider using: 'many interpretations'.
Suggestion: many interpretations
...e not good in Ballet. So, there can be many interpretation regarding the assumption. So whether...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
... So whether Pirouettes Ballet School is best choice for any student or not is depend...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 130, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... many factors like student choice, price ,etc. So to support the argument these fa...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 297.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05387205387 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49578769709 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498316498316 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.111359126 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.3888888889 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400413433749 0.218282227539 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129041274662 0.0743258471296 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795163454441 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222131292976 0.128457276422 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615722673074 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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