The president of Grove College suggests changing from all-female education to coeducation to increase the admission and enrollment by admitting males to the school. However, the Director of the Alumnae opposes the plan since the all-female education has been the identity of the school. To decide the suggestion of the president, there are three questions to be answered.
First, the DA said the all-female education the very identity of the college. However, is it the only identity of the college? Perhaps, the college became popular due to its excellent curriculum and faculties or good facilities. There might be other identities that the college stands for. Therefore, the change from the all-female education might not affect the identity of the college much. Thus, it needs further information related to the characteristics of the college that affects its identity.
Second, the DA mentioned that in the survey of Grove alumnae, the majority of them strongly favored keeping the college all female. Nevertheless, it does not involve the opinions of other members of the college such as current students or faculty. When including the opinions of students and faculty, the result might favor the change to coeducation. Thus, the information regarding the response from all members of the college is needed to strengthen the argument.
Last, the president of the Grove college did not offer whether the plan will be feasible or not. It is possible that the plan is not feasible. For instance, there is not enough residence or classrooms which can cover the increased enrollment. If so, the increased number of students might diminish the general condition of the education offered to the students. It might damage the reputation of the college and the application for the school might decrease accordingly. Thus, it needs to be corroborated whether the plan is able to be practiced or not.
To sum up, to decide whether the college would abandon its all-female education, the three aforementioned questions need to be answered. If not, the plan will not beget the expected result.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK. need to argue 'The director also points to a survey of Grove alumnae in which a majority of respondents strongly favored keeping the college all female.'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1706 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.062 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.774 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.048 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.1 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1754.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 337.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20474777448 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85762993296 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46587537092 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.5612665616 57.8364921388 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.5238095238 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0476190476 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365123827097 0.218282227539 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111687969728 0.0743258471296 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0880953028647 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21467288125 0.128457276422 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671085545913 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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