Prompt: ‘The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora.
"Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.’
The researcher idea that decline means lower activity level due to stagnant work such as sit in the front of the computer might wrong because the lengthy time between the research may confound the result. People maybe grow old then prevalent to degenerative disease hence the lower status. It needs a backup evidence to support the idea such as the background of the sample. Moreover, what standard they use for the measurement? As the text implies, they use different scale or rule to get the result. It may because of the change of indicator and variable not necessarily the fitness level. The sample in preceded time might yield the same result with the current research.
The statement of lower lever fitness cause by using the computer also seems problematic. What the reason they assume that people who work a long duration with a computer may lower the overall fitness level. Is it they don’t work out or denied healthy diet? There is no direct connection to the statement although the fact of physical fitness level connects with exercise.
The author refutes the researcher claim that the decline of the fitness level of Corpora’s citizen due to spending too much time using a computer. The author claim that area with highest computer ownership has the best fitness citizen assume that the owner means use the computer as well. Let’s say the numerous computer in the neighborhood just use for occasional email or game and the people still actively engaged in outdoor activities hence the higher level of fitness level, the author claim may prove warranted.
Moreover, the text backs up the statement of lower fitness level due to economic growth projected by the purchase of sports equipment and services. This based on the assumption that people use their additional income to buy the sports equipment etcetera hence the lower income means low chance to work out and decline of fitness level. However, if the people simply don’t buy new equipment because the old one still good, the sports utility doesn’t consumable product it doesn’t break easily, the assumption could be wrong. The idea that people don’t like to do sport or don't engage in physical activity will impact their fitness level regardless the economic status that time.
Based on all stated reason, the research might not reliable hence wrong or partially correct with the assumption that using the computer too much might affect fitness level it. However, the refutes comment from the author has so many loopholes that the idea may not hold the truth as it seems.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
argument 4 -- OK
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flaws:
Need an introduction paragraph.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 433 350
No. of Characters: 2076 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.562 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.794 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.333 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.65 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.386 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.54 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 378, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l fitness level connects with exercise. The author refutes the researcher claim ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the highest'.
Suggestion: with the highest
... a computer. The author claim that area with highest computer ownership has the best fitness...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 229, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... use their additional income to buy the sports equipment etcetera hence the lower inco...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 592, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...t people don't like to do sport or dont engage in physical activity will impact...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 19.6327345309 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2163.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 427.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06557377049 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48355990624 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470725995316 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8771626055 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.15 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.35 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0990625143424 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0328146940436 0.0743258471296 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473013805134 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0552549895929 0.128457276422 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397984630768 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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