The argument concludes that the residents of stairs only apartments had comparatively better health and longivity than those who were living in houses having elevator. To support his/her claim the author mentions that the daily exercise needed to climb stair as a contributing factor to this situation. However, it is not convincingly evident from the argument that the apparent disparity is only due to this reason. Several alternative explanations can be drawn which may undermine the explanation offered by the author of this argument.
Firstly, the author mentions that elderly residents of buildings with elevator used to make a higher number of visits to doctor. However, this does not necessarily prove the fact that residents of the buildings with elevator were less healthy. Usually buildings wth elevators cost more than the ones which do not have them. So in majority of the cases residents of the buildings with elevator are more financially well off. Due to this fact, the number of visits to doctor can be higher. Keeping in mind that visits to doctor cost a considerable amount of money, this phenomenon could be explained this way. Furthermore, as the residents of the houses with no elevator may have less opportunity to consult doctors regularly due to their financial paucity. Due to their less visits to doctor they may be less cognizant of the complications their health.
Secondly, as the residents of the buildings with elevators are comparatively richer they are more likely to be obese. To their obesity only the mere fact of using stair may not be the contributing factor, other factors which are more important like sedentary lifestyle, food habit and lack of exercise may be construed as the reason for their obesity. Moreover, the residents of the houses with no elevators may be more likely to healthy due to their overall lifestyle. It is possible that a lot of them are employed in jobs which require physical labour. They may have a less calories and fat intake which is the main reason of the diseases like diabetes and heart disease.
Finally, the amount of time people spend in climbing stair is fairly low. It is very much unlikely that this would have a signifant impact on the total health of the residents. Again, the amount of time people spend climbing stairs varies a lot. For example, a person who lives in the 5th floor may need to spend 5 times more time than the people who lives in the ground floor of a building. We cannot conclude anything,only on the basis of the assumption that residents of houses with no elevator spend a significant amount time climbing stairs
In conclusion, the argument is vulnerable to several alternative explantations which may weaken the claim presented by the author. If the author had provided a more detailed evidence with reliable survey /data analysis then the argument would have been much more convincing.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 486 350
No. of Characters: 2364 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.695 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.864 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.613 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.861 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'bettered', 'welled'.
Suggestion: bettered; welled
...tairs only apartments had comparatively better health and longivity than those who wer...
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Line 3, column 706, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tor may have less opportunity to consult doctors regularly due to their financial...
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Line 3, column 771, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun visits is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...o their financial paucity. Due to their less visits to doctor they may be less cogni...
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Line 5, column 459, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e likely to healthy due to their overall lifestyle. It is possible that a lot of ...
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Line 5, column 574, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer calories'?
Suggestion: fewer calories
...equire physical labour. They may have a less calories and fat intake which is the main reason...
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Line 5, column 574, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun calories is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...equire physical labour. They may have a less calories and fat intake which is the ma...
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Line 7, column 285, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... For example, a person who lives in the 5th floor may need to spend 5 times more...
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Line 7, column 358, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...imes more time than the people who lives in the ground floor of a building. We c...
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Line 7, column 379, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he people who lives in the ground floor of a building. We cannot conclude anythi...
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Line 7, column 423, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , only
... a building. We cannot conclude anything,only on the basis of the assumption that res...
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Line 7, column 477, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...asis of the assumption that residents of houses with no elevator spend a signifi...
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Line 7, column 502, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at residents of houses with no elevator spend a significant amount time climbing...
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Line 7, column 551, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... significant amount time climbing stairs In conclusion, the argument is vulnerabl...
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Line 9, column 132, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...aken the claim presented by the author. If the author had provided a more detailed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 484.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70271942725 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448347107438 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 766.8 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2874158871 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.217391304 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0434782609 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69565217391 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176861948342 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601337574379 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597190917554 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990403141321 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575565996672 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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