Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The argument is flawed because of numerous reasons. For one, there is lack of evidence that suggests finding only one "Palean" basket in Lithos refutes its unique "Palean" authenticity. And again, the basket could have reached Lithos via alternative methods other than boats which the passage doesn't take into account.
Firstly, the passage assumes that since the Palean people weren't found to possess a boat, they couldn't have passed the Brim river and so there was no way that the Palean basket could have gotten in Lithos which, therefore, proves that the Palean basket was not uniquely Palean. But it doesn't consider the possibility that Palean people might have used transport method other than boats such as large rafts or even big ships to get there. Or, maybe the Palean people did have some boat but they were destroyed during the time the researchers found the palean civilization. Maybe someone bought the basket in Palea and then returned to his home in Lithos and that’s how the pot was found in Lithos. Therefore, to prove that the palean people had no way to get to Lithos the passage needs to provide information about the other kinds of transport methods that the paleans may have utilized.
Even after the transport method may have been assessed, we need to think that maybe the basket didn't need to reach there via a specific person. One basket could have easily floated through the Brim river to Lithos and someone who noticed it might have just appropriated it for its own use. To assess this, however, we need to know the fact whether the basket would float in river water and even then we would need to know whether the flow of the river would take it towards Lithos or any other direction away from it.
Finally, there is also something to know about the culture of the Palean people. They might have practised teaching students from places other than their village their craft, and among them one could definitely be from Lithos. Again, a resident of Palea who was also an artisan later might have migrated to or simpley traveled to Lithos and might have disseminated his skills there. To evaluate this, however, we need to know about the culture of the Paleans.
All these considered, we can come to the conclusion that, we need a lot more than what is provided to determine whether the basket was unique to the Palean people or not and without those evidences the conclusion of the passage is definitely flawed.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Again, a resident of Palea who was also an artisan later might have migrated to or simpley traveled to Lithos and might have disseminated his skills there.
Error: simpley Suggestion: simply
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argument 1 -- not OK . beter to say: people in Lithos may have boats.
argument 2 -- not exactly. better to say: maybe the Brim River is not very deep and broad at that time.
argument 3 -- not exactly.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 428 350
No. of Characters: 1974 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.548 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.612 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.184 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.059 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.379 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.606 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.152 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...hods other than boats which the passage doesnt take into account. Firstly, the pass...
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Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...ge assumes that since the Palean people werent found to possess a boat, they couldnt h...
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Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...le werent found to possess a boat, they couldnt have passed the Brim river and so there...
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Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... basket was not uniquely Palean. But it doesnt consider the possibility that Palean pe...
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Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... we need to think that maybe the basket didnt need to reach there via a specific pers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 423.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85342789598 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43089697387 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468085106383 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5144212994 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.3125 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4375 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203597482431 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724620167117 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403548786492 0.0701772020484 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105418448717 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462367336549 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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