The author argued about the woven baskets which previously were found in a village named Palea but he made a very strong conclusion about those basket's originate with some very unrelated evidences. The author's claim about the Brim river and boats do not strengthen the fact about woven basket. More evidences are needed to evaluate the original inventor of the woven basket.
Firstly, the author cited that, woven baskets have been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea. Therefore, it was believed that Palean people made those baskets. This statement contradicts with the conclusion the author has made. If the baskets were only found in Palea village, it is obvious that the palean people made those baskets.
Secondly, there is no mention about what and how the woven basket is made of. The author did not mention the fundamental materials by which the woven baskets are made of. Such evidence is needed to evaluate whether those material were available in Palea village or Lithos village.It is a general fact that, people makes things by those materials which are available and abundant around them. As it is not mentioned whether the materials were available in Palea or Lithos village , it is hard to evaluate the fact that which village people made those baskets.
Another evidence that is needed to support the argument is the main profession of the people of those two villages. The author did not mention about the villagers profession, therefore it is difficult to find out which villagers actually made the woven baskets.
Lastly, the author’s claim about the Brim river and Palean boat do not have any relation with the woven basket. The author first said that woven baskets were found in Palea village. But by the next sentence he//she proposed that woven baskets were found in an ancient village called Lithos which was situated across the Brim River from the Palea village. The author cited that as the Palean people do not have any boats and the river is too deep to cross without a boat, the woven baskets were not uniquely made by the Palean people. But the statement does not support the argument in any way. It could be possible that if Lithos people had boats, they crossed the river and came to Palea village to buy the woven basket. The evidence can be said in the other way round, which is, Lithos people went to Palea village to sell the baskets. But there is no such evidence about the Lithos village as well.
The argument lacks of quite a number of evidences which could have strengthen the fact that Palean people invented the woven basket. The evidence of materials, where those materials were available, who were the supplier and who were the buyers-these could have helped to find the original founder of woven basket. The argument is incomplete for which the conclusion cannot be stated as proven.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 241, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e authors claim about the Brim river and boats do not strengthen the fact about w...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...able in Palea village or Lithos village.It is a general fact that, people makes th...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ere available in Palea or Lithos village , it is hard to evaluate the fact that wh...
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Line 7, column 155, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'villagers'' or 'villager's'?
Suggestion: villagers'; villager's
.... The author did not mention about the villagers profession, therefore it is difficult t...
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Line 11, column 68, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'strengthened'.
Suggestion: strengthened
... a number of evidences which could have strengthen the fact that Palean people invented th...
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Line 11, column 315, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d the original founder of woven basket. The argument is incomplete for which the co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2399.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 489.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90593047035 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3229662994 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.366053169734 0.468620217663 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 761.4 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.471057884232 425% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9818804893 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9583333333 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58333333333 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311955854055 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110061766075 0.0743258471296 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0969098775976 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186932594497 0.128457276422 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10544906068 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.