argument essay
The argument claims that The Mercury's circulation has decreased by 10,000 readers only because The Bugle, lower-priced newspaper has been started five years ago. Further, the argument suggests that in order to increase the circulation of The Mercury, it has to lower the price, below the price of The Bugle and that too only till the circulation levels reaches the moderate levels as was before. The argument assumes that the increased level of circulation of The Mercury can help to attract businesses to advertise in their paper. The argument manipulates the facts ...
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Sentence: Further, the
Sentence: Further, the argument suggests that in order to increase the circulation of The Mercury, it has to lower the price, below the price of The Bugle and that too only till the circulation levels reaches the moderate levels as was before.
Description: The fragment was before . is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace before with adjective
Sentence: Without convincing answers to the question, one is left with the impression that the argument is more of a wishful thinking rather than a substantive evidence.
Description: The tag a qualifier, pre is not usually followed by of
Suggestion: Refer to more and of
Sentence: The argument claims that The Mercury's circulation has decreased by 10,000 readers only because The Bugle, lower-priced newspaper has been started five years ago.
Error: lower-priced Suggestion: lower priced
Sentence: Even though The Bugle is low-priced, it has many interesting features such as prizes for crossword puzzles, games such as tambola, or discount schemes, which are atrracting many readers and the readers of The Mercury as well.
Error: atrracting Suggestion: attracting
Error: low-priced Suggestion: low priced
Sentence: In order to assess the merits of a paricular situation, one has to know about all the contributing factors.
Error: paricular Suggestion: particular
Sentence: This particular argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate due to lack of informative stuff.
Error: unsubstantiated Suggestion: No alternate word
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Score: 5.5- 6.0 out of 6
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 469 350
No. of Characters: 2343 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.654 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.996 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.701 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.318 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.417 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
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