Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Although many may treat heros and role models as the highest ideals to follow,these deemed exemplary people could be misleading. They can be just a creation of the authority, governments, or political leaders. Neglecting plenty of wicked doing, they are extoled in TVs, newspaper, or other mass media, leaving many important traditional value behind. Actually, the main character of a society should lies deeply in desposition of the majority, as it is called character of the society.
First, the so-called heros or role models are just the figure for propaganda, nothing relevent to highest ideals of the society. As in many nations, these heroes are produced for reasons, some for arousing the attention of the population and encouraging them into war while soem others for focusing people on development of technology, marketing, or research of science. No matter what are them based on, they are for one crucial purpose, the benefit of the authority, maybe a dictator or some wealthy oligarchs.
Second, to create such a too-ideal-to-be-true role models, something must be hidden. Values of marriage, rituals of traditional culture, or, even nearly negligible, the violation of laws, are abandoned. For example, a hero may be a professional killer who cold-blood assasinate an enemy leader, with a brutal method. In point of views of the public, this criminal should be sentenced to death. However, on quite contrary, he is complimented, laoded, and even glorified, becoming a prototype which the government excite its people to follow. Despite how absurd it is, these kinds of strategies are used in our mundane world.
Third, the very character of a society, in fact, is shared by the majority in the country. Peace, caring others, obeying laws, and other virtue which were praised by our ancestors and are extoled by our parents as well as us will be lauded by our offspring. Including in perconality of everybody, as for our forefathers, this disposition then ought to be treated as the character of our society. In spite of being ignored of the government as a commonplace, these shall form, shape our nation and decide which direction we will move forward.
In the end, we can't consider heroes and role models as a society's highest ideals , nor could we treat heros and role models as the character of a society. To be candid, they overshadow the most important but common valus of a nation, which live in our hearts. To find out the character of a society, the observers have to live within the country, develop friendship with people, and feel the atmosphere there, fresh and withour contamination of so-called ideals.
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Sentence: Actually, the main character of a society should lies deeply in desposition of the majority, as it is called character of the society.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to should and lies
Sentence: However, on quite contrary, he is complimented, laoded, and even glorified, becoming a prototype which the government excite its people to follow.
Description: The fragment government excite its is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace excite with verb, past tense
Sentence: Actually, the main character of a society should lies deeply in desposition of the majority, as it is called character of the society.
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Sentence: First, the so-called heros or role models are just the figure for propaganda, nothing relevent to highest ideals of the society.
Error: relevent Suggestion: relevant
Sentence: As in many nations, these heroes are produced for reasons, some for arousing the attention of the population and encouraging them into war while soem others for focusing people on development of technology, marketing, or research of science.
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Sentence: However, on quite contrary, he is complimented, laoded, and even glorified, becoming a prototype which the government excite its people to follow.
Error: laoded Suggestion: loaded
Sentence: Including in perconality of everybody, as for our forefathers, this disposition then ought to be treated as the character of our society.
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Sentence: To be candid, they overshadow the most important but common valus of a nation, which live in our hearts.
Error: valus Suggestion: value
Sentence: To find out the character of a society, the observers have to live within the country, develop friendship with people, and feel the atmosphere there, fresh and withour contamination of so-called ideals.
Error: withour Suggestion: without
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