Author claims that a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. I agree with this argument as same curriculum will helpful for nation.
A nation should have such education plan for students in country that will help to students become competent in world. Hence education system of nation should be same for all students. Hence I agree that all students living in a nation should have same national curriculum. However there can little bit variations. For example in India every state has different language therefore mother tongue as a language can be different for different states but we can make a common language as English for the students.
When a nation is having same national curriculum then all students have same competent line so they can be graded on a same scale. Hence it is very essential to have same criteria.
However for undeveloped nations all students can not get same facilities throughout nation. So making same academics will not be useful for this situation. For example in rural places students can not get trained teacher to teach them or advanced facilities required for practical in case of sciences. Then how rural place student understand the same academics as city. For this case first nation should make all schools well trained and fulfill with proper educational system requirements. This will make all schools on same level then same academics can be taught to students. But making this can be perfect kind of situation still a nation can tried for that.
Moreover author says that same curriculum can be maintained up to school level only because upto school level all students can determine our field of interest later on they can choose respective fields. For example in schools we all have fundamental sciences, social sciences, languages as a part of curriculum but for further studies a student who writes poems in fluent manner, he can develop his skill after studying arts or a student has brilliance in mathematics he can do his graduation in mathematics. . Hence this same curriculum can be made up to college level.
In all I would like to conclude as when all students living in a nation will go through same national curriculum then students have basic intellectual level which will helpful for further studies. Also national can evaluate all students on same grade. This will reduce to take extra exams and evaluations for different students. However keeping same curriculum should consider national development of a country.
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Sentence: Moreover author says that same curriculum can be maintained up to school level only because upto school level all students can determine our field of interest later on they can choose respective fields.
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