Although the author states his reasons for ensuring that having a local jazz club is profitable, yet some solid evidence are required to make sure that the mentioned reasons apply to a local jazz club in Monoreo and guarantee a good market.
First of all, the fact that the nearest jazz club is far from Monoreo does not necessarily imply that having one in the city is needed or desired. In fact, perhaps exactly the reverse, the reason that this club is away from Monoreo is that market is satisfying in Monoreo or its vicinity. For instance, if the author had stated that he has talked to the ow...
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Sentence: But some evidence should be present that indicate presence of such fans in Monoreo will brought C-note a good amount of money.
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