"The only good is knowledge with cooperation and the only evil is ignorance through competition"
This is one of the overused cliche applicable to one's development. While, some believe that development of an individual lies within the cooperation of how he is perceiving the things taught to them. Other, contends that the growth of the individual is achievable by introducing the competition in the field he is acquring. However, I strongly believe that to prepare young people for the society its the sense of belonging in the learning and sage behaviour that plays a pivotal role that can be seen in the following reasoning and examples.
First, in today's modern world everyone is indulged with their banal life that follows routine rehasing throughout the week. Each one of them is involved in the competition of getting braver and stronger than other to be an apotheosis example in their respective fields. This way of living life has introduced an artfull behavioural of guileing others to gain advantage over them and move forward. However, this is not the factor that has caused one to excel in their life, the dogged attitude along with instilling cooperation results in success of one's life.For example, a famous Indian cricketer Sachin Tendulkar has been able to achieve great height's in his carrer by dedicating his life to his field in a cooperative manner. He is an unassuming player that thinks beyond the competition as he knows this is not the right way of achieving milestone.
Second, introducing the competition in the young people from the start does not allow them to follow their heart of pursuing something that one's desire. By emphasizing repeatedly on the things to be acieved through the competition, one gets more and more focused on pulverizing his opponent rather than thinking of his personal growth. Also, wining the competition will inculcate within him the stature that he achieves after wining reputation that may in higher stage of his life cause degradation in his carrer.For instance, Saniya Naiyval, the badminton player of India has revolutionized badminton in India during beginning of his carrer. Regardless, she got ranked lower as he progressed in his field due to the fame and class that she received from the society.
In a nutshell, though introducing competition bolster the person of giving his best in developing in his respective field. The way of progressing requires cooperation and dedication to achieve greater milestone.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18564356436 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91394040291 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539603960396 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.6189979879 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.666666667 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9333333333 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46666666667 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165945614344 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562991801254 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534729503158 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876746160482 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615143045955 0.0667264976115 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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